by Cunnilingus_loverno1
Carry on with the cousins, then add on the sister.. I'm sure you can cum up with a way to involve them both..
Do explain how she can lock the door to his room, yet he’s able to enter?
An editor will help with all of the grammar and punctuation istakes that made this such a mess to read. Keep writing, as it is the only way to get better, but get some assistance.
So. Very. Hot.
This is far from great literature, with a variety of issues. You'll probably be getting some comments on that,but I think it's great as is.
5*
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An kind of interesting story. I wasn't going to finish it as there were a number of typos and punctuation/capitalization problems as well as odd dialog. Then when I read that the kids bedrooms were on the first floor and the kitchen and parent's bedrooms were downstairs, I realized that this is not written in 'American English' or that English is your second language. Understanding that makes theses small problems easier to tolerate. Keep writing; maybe if you can find an editor to help you with the simple mechanics of writing, your subsequent stories will be even better.
Great story, I wonder what will happened if he gets her pregnant.. 🤰🏼