All Comments on 'It Needed Doin' - John Corso'

Absolutely loved your story. You say it needed doin'... well you did it good.

Lamarr needs to catch a mugging and drown in a small puddle. 5*

Very well done except for careless editing. Spelling of name ‘Corso’ varied and for a while the daughter became Janie.

Good job ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Disturbing. Yes, the first part worked out right, but what then? Do we make up the rest?

Nobody won in this one. That was one evil ex-wife that I wish we got some closure on.

With a 50% divorce rate, this story or one too much like it happens often I would imagine. This one just went all the way to a justifiable death by a court-screwed dad trying to save his family. The ex wife needs about 25 years to ponder her decisions. Of course the police officer has just realized that he may already be too late to save his son from his stepfather and his corrupting influence 5 stars in spite of some writing issues.

Shucks, so many bad endings to attend to, so little time!

Mmmmmmm different

Good story, interesting characters. Many thanks.

Wow, a very tough story, one of those you sometimes read about in the news.

And it's always hard to understand why?

It's bad enough that lying, betraying and cheating make you a shitty person, but we're always wondering how people can act like this.

The first part ends well for John, because whatever the consequences, he's lucky to have saved his children.

Now what happens to Damart?

Can't wait to read the rest. 5⭐

Great story. Very disquieting

Great story, great details, great ending. Keep it up!

Time for this guy to plant something bad in hos former buddy's car. D

The writing was world-class and I'd love to know if you've written novels because of the depth of insight. I would also love to see a sequel - just a short one to reassure us that the Corso family survived and that there was accountability for the criminal and anti-social acts committed.

Damn this is great.

What a superb piece of writing. Thank you. I do hope there is a sequel forthcoming. Fine work.

Looking forward to part two. Damar has to save his son from himself. Lamar is still dirty and Damar is going to make him pay.

Good writing. Thoroughly enjoyable. Keep up the good work.

Excellent story. While I’d like more, I could also live with this cliffhanger of an ending.

Well done.

Hope there's more to come

This is a major upgrade in what we usually get around this corner of Literotica. A difficult topic portrayed from the point of view of an outside party and it hits hard. Impressive work.

Hard to like such a well written story about such a tragic set of circumstances. It seems all to real.

Thanks.

Nicely done! Good setup for a follow piece. I think Lamarr needs to learn a bit about how cops look out for each other. He's an attitude just begging for an adjustment.

Great story!

Fine work. Thanks.

Fantastic story and series. Hoping to see Lamar get some kind of justice later down the road. Again great story and writing. As a father of 4 I can feel the emotion of your characters.

Well thought out, well written about a subject that most shy away from. My only disappointment is that we are left hanging with the outcome with the officer's son. Or maybe (hopefully) there is a part 2 to complete the story. 5 stars.

Great story Great writing

Liked it until the end...but I see its a series, so I won't say more than that till I read the rest.

I really dislike it when writers plan a series and don't make it obvious in the title. A "Chapter 1" in the name is not alot to ask. Right up to the non-ending, very good.

Great story. This is one that could have another chapter if the author chooses, but as is, it works for me as a vignette.

Tough read. You did an excellent job of pulling me into the story and characters. As it's a series, I hope we get to see what happens to the mother of Jeanie, see if her act works. Look forward to the next installment. 4.7*

It's difficult to make over-the-top good, but you pretty much did. Mattolo is not just a bad guy, but a caricature of a bad guy, and writers usually lose me when they get the bad guys caricatured that badly, but you didn't

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I wasn't thrilled with the detective having his own ex-wife with a bad guy scene; that seemed too forced.

‘It Needed Doin’ is a helluva fun series. I hope you continue to add to it. I’d love to see Delmar and Lamarr settle accounts, and I’m still wondering if Theo will get justice from the Mueller clan! Thanks very much for your stories.

5* … needs a sequel about Damar.

I'd like to find out how Damar deals with his own issues with his former friend. 5* story

If I was ranking this on outcome, I would give it a "1" But I am ranking this on presentation and am giving it a "5". The all hell that fathers and children go through because of our irrational belief that women are always the best for the children, is now becoming legendary. I'm 85 and in the 70's spent over $15,000 trying to save my kids from a woman that had been in a private mental hospital twice for a month at a time. I now have 4 totally screwed up kids. One is in prison for life, one has 2 strikes against her in California, all four have been poisoned against me.

Really well written, a clever way to tell the story.

But what happened to the wife?

And I really hope there is a part 2 where Damar tries to help his kid.

Fantastic story! thanks

Heartbreaking, yet there is some hope in the end. Even as the officer finds himself staring into an abyss like that of the MC.

Great story including the end. Fr more interesting than a ‘happily ever after’ ending.

Well written. good character and plot development, absolutely begs for Ch. 2 to deal with the Lamar problem - and probably Shawna, too. Write on!

Well written and enjoyable. Excellent character development. Thank you.

That was intense. I wonder if Lamarr has a long future ahead? 5*****! from me for a powerful story.

Very VERY well written! 5 stars easy. I just want some resolution for Damar and DL.

Good writing, hard story to read due to the content. Good outcome for the Dad protecting his kids. John needs to go get DL out of that situation.

I liked the first chapter, and this one was very well done. I can tell there's more story, though.

Very good story, very well told.

I feel sorry for the cop in the end! He's in a no win situation.

5

Two weeks later, Lamar and Shawna were pulled over during a routine traffic stop. The 2 keys of cocaine in their trunk led to felony arrests for both of them (both of their fingerprints were found on the packaging).

DL is in counseling.

Holy fuck this was good.

Like, so good I didn’t want it to end. I know you had to keep it PG because of the minor but this happened to my cousin. Only she was 12 and it didn’t end with her being rescued in time. Her mom, my aunt, basically pimped her out to keep her man interested.

Thank you for this and for the *relatively* happy ending. It makes me imagine a happy ending for my cousin.

Tragic but wonderfully written story, really enjoyed it. Would love to know more of the ex-wifes side and the consequences

Good story, but unfinished.

Good story until the crap abrupt ending!

Lamar needs to get his, Shawna needs to be in a wheelchair while she works her corner and the boy, probably a lost cause by now, needs the shit beat out of him. Not much you can do to offset the divorce courts. Better to do it yourself, easier on everyone.

Spectacular job of writing.

5 stars

Wow. Amazing story. So real, it reads like a movie script. *****

Maybe I missed it, but why didn’t Corso talk to somebody in social services about the condition of his kids?

The wife hooking up with her husband’s school bully is becoming quite a meme, here. Makes me wonder how often it really happens.

Wow. That was great.

I gave that a rare 5 stars

This is one good thing about coming from a tough town with family from the ghetto. If I had a bully like Mark messing with me and the school wouldn't deal with it, he would've just been jumped in the parking lot. Mark really needed to be in an environment where his bad behavior wouldn't be coddled. He'd still be a stupid asshole, but might not push it so far knowing there's actual consequences.

Oh NO..

It's time for the cop to set up his ex wife and friend, put them in jail for a long time and straighten out his son.

This was.... awful. Well written and well developed but fucking hell, awful. I won't score it because I won't be impartial. I can't.

Last section wasn't an ending. Maybe a setup for the next part? I doubt it. He still needs to rescue his son...

@Wandering_Mongol

This ain't over yet.

FTDS please

All those loose ends...[a tidy ending is not real world]

I enjoyed it, 5 star for me.

It Needed Doing, Damar?

Outstanding. So called family courts are a travesty, and many of the judges should be in prison.

Despite the many mixed-up names: ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

But this story urgently needs a continuation. Damar's private situation is not resolved as well as the question how the police issue handcuffs used on Shawn came into the Mattolo household. IMO, there's a need for some words from slut wife Jean.

Great story but I want more!

except for the non sequitur at the end, this was an above average story. But I have to rate the whole story, not the first 80% of it.

Very unsatisfying ending. This is why fathers must obtain joint custody, it is becoming the standard, and fathers need to take advantage of the change in family court philosophy. Divorce really fucks the man if he doesnt have 50-50 control over the kids. The ex getting involved with predators is common, and must be combatted as best one can. Story was super realistic, taut, and well put together.

I'm hoping for a part 2. This was a great story with lots of detail. 5 stars

It needed doin' is a series I'll be waiting for from now on

I loved this story. I does need some editing, but that is a minor issue. The ending is haunting.

Really well done. Great writing. Tragic story that ended good for Corso. Only missing piece was consequences for Jeane Corso?

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And of course…the unfinished story for Damar and his kid. Hopefully you’ll take a shot at that?

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5 *****

Well written. So caught up in the emotional charge I missed the inconsistencies mentioned (by a potential editor). Very relatable for me as I was bullied in school by prominent athletes in my own community. Not sure what the author's intention was but found it very emotional which I know writers strive for. Would be interested in a follow up with the officer's own situation. Not going to incite the gun advocates but everyone has a breaking point. It wasn't until the end of high school I learned it only takes 5 lbs of pressure to release a trigger. Might makes right for some. With might comes responsibility and in this happy ending consequences. Loved that it did not end happily. There is no happiness in this sort of tragedy. Well done. 5 stars. Wow I think I am starting a voting trend!!

Wow! Definitely needs to be continued! Lots of potential here for some excellent reading.

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Really, really good.

Wow! Very well done... I want to know what happens next!

It was good, but unfinished.

This needs the following (or similar) for a satisfying conclusion:

1) Some kind of recovery scene for the Corso family, with the son and daughter happily reunited with their father.

2) Their evil cunt of a mother needs to be destroyed, with a long jail term for everything she did. The lies and blackmail in the divorce. Preventing her ex-husband from having contact with his kids. The turning a blind eye to the child abuse... she needed to suffer.

3) A long jail term for Mark Junior + friends, until he gets stabbed to death in a dispute with other inmates.

4) The youngest spawn dumped into the uncaring care system.

5) A resolution to Lamarr situation with the ex-wife. Cops can bend the law to bring down a world of shit on people that mess with them. Lamarr needs to be harassed by the detective's friends on the force, until they find dirt on him and have him thrown in jail... along with the ex-wife if she's involved in drugs etc.

6) The detective straightening out his son, with Lamarr's "Bad End" proof that being a criminal ruins your life.

Totally wrong catagory dude. Try Non-erotic

Ain't no Loving Wife or Loving Husband. Non sex

Finish the story. do NOT leave him like this.

I so wanted to be able to give this the full five for it's originality and for being such a compelling read but the MC's ex wife getting off scot free torpedoed that. The story was further spoiled by the number of mistakes made with the characters' names, something which I don't normally associate with this author. It somehow seemed incomplete with a number of loose ends left hanging.

JR

This could go on and be a good did the cop off Lamar lol great read. Been a while for a great read. Too .too many cuck stories lately. Seem all the half a fags started writing daily

The only good part of this stori is that Mark Mattolo got his due.

Very good storyline. Tragic but good. All the evidence falling into place quickly, which, just by looking at the media these days, never seems to happen. Hopefully we can find out about the character John's ex, her side of the story. Looking to find out how the police officer will handle his own situation.

Anony wrote, "So called family courts are a travesty, and many of the judges should be in prison."

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Family courts do not exist to provide justice; they exist to determine what is in the best interests of the children, and there is a long-standing, and normally accurate, perception that the children are better off with the mother than the father. Whether a father believes that to be just or not makes no difference.

It was a good story, up until the end when you tossed it in the toilet.

Had you made it an actual wake-up call where Damar stepped in and acted like a father again, that would have been good. Having it be a "Oh, well, my kid isn't worth more than a half-assed phone call." just sucked the positive energy out.

Also, saying that family court was going to get drug through the mud, only to not have family court get drug through the mud was a letdown.

So, a good ~2.5 pages of good story...

FTDS

Terrific story which had my rapt attention throughout. Different from the usual fare we get in Loving Wives but the category is better off for it. 5*.

Was a 5 until the ending, then dropped to a 1.

Well told and I liked that they keep the father out of jail and that he got his kids - maybe. Really hated the ending. Lots of things unanswered. If this story is going to continue it would have been better if you had labeled this as chapter one.

Powerful five star special.

Really great story and the action in the police interview was right on the money as my own experience as amilitary policeman during Nam and also as a corrections officer in the TDCJ

Is that the end?????

What a shame - a good story spoilt

not what I expected this morning but good, thanks.

Compelling story until it fell apart with a non-ending. A "to be continued" could have saved it.

Great story, extremely strong emotions in the writing. Hopefully John will get his life back……

Hope there’s more! Thanks for writing.

I would have liked to know more about the ex wife, was the catatonia real? How does she feel about trading in a good husband for the bad boy now?