by BlkRainbow
The beginning read offers great promise. Unfortunately, the author seemingly likes to 'tease'......NOT COOL!!! Oh, by the way, the editing is very good--unlike many other literotica stories.
When I saw Chapter 2 listed as a "new" story, I was overjoyed having just read Chapter 1,, few days ago.( and wanting more).
I think that Carmina would be pleasing to anybody. Not only is she competent but carries a strong degree of sophistication in her character. She is a 'keeper', or close to it. I can't imagine anyone replacing her. After all, she is a major pesonality/character in your storyline..Plus, your discription presents her as more than simply attractive. She's sexy,intelligent, dresses well, and knows how to carry herself around a man. Probably a damn good cook , as well
But. I'll be patient. Even though the story is opening slowly, it promises a degree of excitement, sex, other interesting characters--including your fiance (lovely and sexy-.Well worth the wait---so far,so good! I'm looking forward to Chpts3,4,5,6,..why not a novel.
I can see this happening. Not an overt predatory stalking but certainly leaving a scent that's hard not to follow. Exacting descriptions with realistic motivations and reactions. You've got me hooked. Ignore anonymous' racist rant. It has nothing to do with THIS story.
I appreciate your comments! It is not my intention to tease. Instead, I am trying to let the story unfold to reflect some of the twists and turns that lie ahead. This is my first story and your comments will help 'fine tune' others I will write.
Thanks again!