All Comments on 'It's Not Always What it Seems Pt. 02'

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EGRIEGRIover 2 years ago
Part II really makes this come together - - - in a good way

Mission impossible is underway and I am eagerly awaiting part 3.

The thrashing you got for the original Part 1 have certainly been turned into a pleasing get the bad guy story.

Perhaps Epstein was one of those customers that knew too much about this senator.

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago
Just doesn't make much sense

The senator's been raping men for five years and it didn't blow up in the whole time? The mc endures being assfucked for what reason again? Steph develops a screwed, half assed conscience why exactly? Nah, dude, your problem aren't your imagined haters but the real flaws in your "tale".

DenaliFXDenaliFXover 2 years ago

EXQUISITE. This reader, with a PhD in Poli Sci and once the brains behind a "bellwether" $14 billion hedge fund for more than a generation, can see only one problem with this start (which so far leaves my mouth watering). There are no senators this smart - or at least there were none before Bill Clinton nor any as smarmy before Donald Trump. My job is to predict the future (and it will be a fucking unbelievably dramatic one) and you are doing that in a way that could be exciting - and surprisingly accurate too! Open our eyes!!!

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