All Comments on 'I've Been Waiting'

by bianchajo

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 13 years ago
@ Corpse_rider

Why read it if you think it's an "agonizing read"? Get a life.

juicycarameljuicycaramelabout 13 years ago
yummy!

very sexxxy & sweet. my husband should thank u b cuzz now i'm ready & waiting 4 him 2 get home! ;) THANX!!!

Corpse_riderCorpse_riderabout 13 years ago
Keep waiting

Poorly written. The first paragraph alone was a battle to get through. The story is in major need of editing if it is hold any reader's attention. The descriptive writing is unimaginitive and clunky. Narratively speaking, this is more of a sex scene than a story, but that in itself is not a problem. The problem lies in the writing, and it will take a lot of work to make this an enjoyable rather than an agonising read.

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