All Comments on 'Jake, the Football Coach'

Good story. A few things need to be cleaned up. “ Jake battled with his conscious.” “conscious” should be “conscience “. There was once where you changed from past tense to present tense in the same paragraph. A good proofreader could help you.

Nice sexy little story, thanks! Let's have more stories.

Please (please!) check for typos, tense changes, incorrect words (conscience/conscious etc.) before posting. Small silly errors give a poor impression of the author.