by OrgasmingLover
I would love to read more of James and Janet's night at the dinner party! Especially since she thinks he is gay and he thinks she is the one. what a conundrum;)
q>"and looked like the hot guy next door, who was unfortunately gay."<Q
careful reading is that the boss is NOT thought gay, but Janet's neighbor who LOOKS LIKE the boss is gay.
pity - it might have made the story yet better your way if Janet WAS confused about that on top of everything else.....
Nice read. Do becareful with the errors though. You introduce her as Miss James and not Janet to Marie. Kinda distracting.
This could be the start of interesting developments.I am curious.
But have your French sentences checked by an editor who speaks French. Your computer generated "French" is awfully off and distracting.
But what a tease! It's disappointing to become involved in a story to have it end so abruptly. Good start. And a comment to readers....the next door neighbor is gay and gorgeous and for a straight girl this IS an unfortunate situation....to desire someone who is unattainable. The boss is straight and fortunately as gorgeous as the gay neighbor.
great beginning, thank you,I like very much your style
loved the story but please your French is horrendous!! :D please write more!
I speak French, and all of yours was obviously computer generated. Stop trying to be something you're not. It comes off as very immature writing.
Thought it was an ok story, ended kind of abruptly. As another who speaks French please please ask someone who does, the free translation sites don't get the context right every time or at all.
I really enjoyed the story and then it came to a quick end. It needs a happily ever after ending!!!!
There are those of us who would find 5' 10" and an 'A' cup VERY sexy!
Please continue with this story, I look forward to the next instalment...