All Comments on 'Jeff's Story'

For a first story, this was very good. I didn't see any major errors in your story, so you are either very good or have a fantastic editor. Either way, it was easy to read. There was plenty of teasing and buildup to the final scene. I look forward to reading what you write in the future, especially if you can delve deeper into the characters. Great job!

It is very refreshing to read a story about a woman written by a woman. I found the story moving at a good pace and liked it.

I hope to hear more from you

Wonderful first story. You've set the bar high!

I enjoyed the build up in your story, great job of not jumping in too quickly or too slowly.

Well done.

Wonderfully written... well done!!!

For a short story, it took forever to get to the point of meeting Jeff and the ending fell flat. It would have been more interesting if Jeff was this mysterious guy who just screwed the hell of Bri, got dressed, smiled, and walked out.