All Comments on 'Jessica Ch. 01'

Everything is spelled correctly but you must mean crotch and not crouch. And do you know that generally the past tense of a verb frequently has the letters "ed" added to it? TurnED, for instance.

This is basically an enjoyable story, but you keep on using legitimate but incorrect wording. Spell checking won't catch this kind of thing. It's jarring to your reader, and it interrupts the effect you are trying to create. "Coed", instead of "cooed", is one example. The reader has to break the flow of concentration to figure out the meaning of the word, then try to get back into the story.

never read a dairy.If you could spell I would give you top marks.

Folks, why not give the guy a break? This IS NOT fucking ENGLISH class!! Remember, there are people all over the world submitting stories to Literotica, and English isn't always there first language. The "Submission Rating" is a "Loved It" or "Didn't Like it" scale, not how well they wrote to YOUR style requirements and personal satisfaction!! I'll give the man a 5 (100%) because there isn't a higher rating available. Sure, we can all hold back on our "fives" vote until the one in a half-million stories has us cummming while reading, the English is SO INCREDIBLY HOT and SEXY (e.g. no misspelled words, no grammar or tense errors, etc.) but how many, HOW MANY of YOU can write a story THIS WELL, in ANY LANGUAGE??

Or did you three *Geek Wisemen* ACE english when you were in school?? Grief, how many people do we all know or heard about that have graduated college with degrees in English, and are (so unfortunately) working at the local K-Mart?

Use a "mind-filter", or "self-hypnosis" if needed, and sit back and enjoy the ride - THANK the authors for sharing their time and imaginations for >our< entertainment... Or were you planning on sending them some cash, or writing them a check?

Wish I had a brother this hot for me, and unable to control himself. :-) This is great stuff and I'm -very much- looking forward to the next chapter! Please hurry <heheh>.

As for me, I am Megan, and my panties were/are soaking wet!

So as a good buddy of mine has said, "Bite my shorts!"

THANK YOU.

I liked the story very much,do't pay any attention to the nit pickers about your english.I'm here to read not grade you on spelling or proper english.Keep on writing and sending to literotica.

I would have given the story a higher mark if it weren't for the spelling, grammar, wrong words, etc. The pacing was good; the basic idea a nice variation on the theme. Get an editor to help you improve.

pacing is everything in these kinds of stories.

Keep writing.

I'll give it high marks, anyway. Most of us could do with some grammar help......

Lukas

it would have been much better if you had finished the story instead of leaving us hanging chapter two could have had them going home for christmas and the parents finding out and you never had them really fuck and him come in her and never said why he couldn't if she wasn't on the pill why was she fucking all the other guys don't be an asshole finish your stories or don't submit them at all

good story, had a hardon all the way through. jessica sounds fucking hot!!!

the tag line had nothing to do with the story he didn't go home to her she went to him how good can a story be if the writer can't even get the tag line right

if she was just getting out of high school at 21 she would be to dumb to go to college most people are getting out of college at 21 and out of high school at 17-18 think before you write this makes you look like a fool

Total load of Rubbish

I feel trolled but I like it.

Get help with the spelling & grammar. You might have a great story but not if the spelling is so bad it's a farce

Ch.02?