All Comments on 'Joe v. Waste Management Mafia'

Nicely done bravo 🤝🤝🤝

5⭐ 🙊🙉🙈

Another one bites the dust!

5

Fina was dirt you must admit,

she ended being led By her twit,

Revenge hubby did take,

Big money was all for his sake!

5* from me

I guess we should just be thankful that this - I was going to say story, but that would be an insult to the art of writing - waste? Is so short. Quite laughable and instantly forgettable.

Amusing little fantasy. The flies to shit metaphor is well used. Thanks much.

Nice snippet for what should be expanded into a full story. 3.7*

Very good!

Should have been obvious that TWO spoiled, narcissistic teenage girls had to be taking after their parents...

Concise but complete, well done. But you missed "mostaccioli," the pasta that gets no respect :-)

That was fun, but I missed the cocktail reference. One thing about that type is they hate to lose to the point of being self-destructive. He isn't safe.

Thanks for the chuckle 4⭐⭐⭐⭐

Brilliant!! I love it when these stories intersect with real day events and people. Great dialogue and no friggin get to know the characters back flashes through out the story

5&Fav and follow. Really top tier writing.

Superman story. D

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Hilarious!

Weak and not even a hint of factual information.

Amusing. Why else do I come to this site

Why were the daughters involved?

That was funny. I liked the vermicelli best.

Would have been better if it was fleshed out. Just seen it was a 750 word "story". Can't give it any more than a 3, as these aren't stories more of a chapter.

CHUCK2468

It was an okay story, even if it was something I've read several times before.

Then you ruined the ending by implying she and her daughters would be raped.

Some of you writers and commenters in this section are sick in the head.

So many different pasta varieties....

I hope that the theft is real. Did he or didn't he take the guys wife to Vegas?

short and sweet. 5

Into every life a little rain must fall for the wise it is a blessing for others it caused mudslides guess who got which in this tail of woe

very funny outcome

Very funny, even though just a bit unrealistic, BTB tale. After the endless femdom cuck-raac propaganda, that's flooding this LW category, one short and refreshing tale with an husband reacting with a male brain, it's absolutely welcome. 5 full stars for this one.

Excellent short story which could be expanded further in the future. Easy 5*.

Nice quick story.

Ah, a fun little skit. Not to be taken seriously of course, and perfect fodder for 750.

Nice but in a way she gets off Scott free as the waste mgt dude isn't going to miss 20 million and still keeps 80% going forward. So best thing would be to say how he dumps the bitch so she does end up with nothing.

Lovely, made my day. Kisses to that beautiful bitch, her stripper name is Karma.

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Only in the land of fantasy can a story like this exist. Mafia types would rather die than allow someone to steal from them. After the MC dies tortured death, Mr mafia will be sitting in millions by the end of the month. You might clean out his bank account, but the enterprise still runs regardless. Even by some act of god the MC wins, the mafia will replace him with someone worse, and revenge is still on the table.

That was incoherent…starting with the intro where it was NEVER made clear why he hooked up with Fina.

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Then it degenerated into a stupid meme of super hacker. Worse than the usual ex SEAL who knows everybody trope.

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2 **

Clever. Inventive. Trim. Taut. Terriffic! You're on my follow-up List!

Short to the point and really weird.

Loved it. Doesn't need a sequel at all but I bet it would be hilarious!

I'm sorry, stories where the hero has all the weapons, and is untouchable lack drama and tension, and therefore are uninteresting. A generous 3.

Superb. I love pasta

Interesting twist.

DOL

Very clever and funny. 5 stars DMW aka Sumnut96

Not awful. Three stars.

JPB

Just a short un-thrilling story ... but where did all those little cocktail umbrellas come from?

An interesting line, but definitely not one for 750 words. 3 stars and wtf with the umbrellas?

A GOOD START, NEEDS FINISHING.

Not bad, but not really good - too easy.

Cute!

Clever and funny.

Improbable but entertaining. Good riddance to bad rubbish

Good idea but we need a story.

Nicely thought out.

Silliness at its finest.

On the literary side, I think you might have embellished a bit more by letting Moretti have a few more words.

Not bad for 750, but I would have loved to read a much longer, more detailed story.

3 stars, average. Its one of those stories that feels REALLY wasted on these infuriating 750 word projects. So much interesting about this story, the husbands backstory, the wife's first marriage, the daughters who apparently the husband no long likes (I must have missed why), and the mafia goon who is getting a cyber-enema.

Good one!!☝️

Good work with just 750 words. I see those other comments. They just don't connect with the idea of the event word limit. Too bad.

I loved the name changes ... at first, I thought it was in error ... nice touch.

I think the cocktail umbrellas indicate that he has already relocated to the tropics. Very good story on another sad reality of today’s world. A competent hacker can steal everything you have with one keystroke. With complete anonymity.

A different way not to be a cuck. For a 750 word story it was good.

For an uber hacker, he's kind of unimaginative. Why didn't he simply take ALL of Pasta's money, AND Fina's, and hack together something to land them in trouble with the Feds (or better yet other organized crime)? Why didn't he take videos of her fucking and spread them far and wide as revenge? Why did he even marry her instead of just fucking her without marrying? 4 stars just because at least this is better than the rest of mostly cuck shit posted here lately, but it definitely wasn't as good as it could have been.

Good for a laugh unless, maybe, you're Italian.

He married a whore, and he wonders at her whoring around? Glad he's good with computers. But how does Wonder Boy skim 20% off the top of gold bars, real estate holdings, or other hard assets? How does WB make those investments disappear with a keyboard click?

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Hey, the stupid cuck got what he married, so he deserved what he got. Including the shit step daughters. I think wonder boy is dumber than he thinks.

Grin.

Ed

Eh? What kind of alternate reality did I miss? An Anon account posting a complaint that the author supposedly blocks anon comments. Wut?

@Anonymous

"A very strong “fuck you” to any author blocking anonymous commenters. Reading all comments to stories steals from the overall experience of visiting LIT, while they might be discomforting to writers. I enjoyed this tale, but one star for your pussy attitude."

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Dunno where you're coming from. I'm not blocking anonymous comments, though this comment has me thinking I should reconsider.

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@26thNC

"I think the cocktail umbrellas indicate that he has already relocated to the tropics."

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Yes, thank you. I realize it was a bit obscure, but 750 words... :)

Hilarious. Mr. Lasagna.

Now THAT was funny !

Five stars funny, with a large side of snark.

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Well played, Sir !

Thanks! Now I'm hungry.

Now you have done the 750 words please finish the story 5***** in anticipation.

Love these stories when a predator doesn't realise whos wife he is dealing with.

Good one! ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

No way he wouldn't appear in a ditch the day after. A ditch on the back of a mafia owned hotel, where they discard used cocktail umbrellas.

With AI and Quantum Computing, the Dark Web will be even scarier. Being a good hacker will be exponentially rewarding. It is still better not to have a whore as a wife and a sleut as a step daughter. Although, according to what people write and post in this site, there are many men and women who enjoy having their partners and family members being loose.

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Phun und phunny!

11/10!!!!!

cool

20 million here, 20% there, not a bad days work!

Funny BTB story. *****

A feature length story of this would be entertaining.

Awesome!

Nice! Pulled the Mafia move on the Mafia. I hate the Mafia, they are the enemy of peace and prosperity, and technological and societal advancement. It's greed on an organized scale vs a society that functions because everyone has an eye for the common good. Mafia is the ultimate selfishness.

Very funny! Cannoli, Spaghetti--great stuff.

Cliche city.

What is with the cocktail umbrellas? Good story and fun to read!

"leave the gun tale the cannoli"

Good story outline, now finish the dam story

Hill-Larry-Us