All Comments on 'John will Never Know'

I’m sorry but this 750 word thing is not very good if you can’t finish the job don’t write it

Okay, what there was of it. I guess my brain shut off at the end because I don't understand how a commotion in the resturant with people going to see the TV had anything to do with John or her marriage. Probably not enough information for us slow people.

Stirred the emotions which is the sign of a good story for me. Keep it going.

Didn't understand the ending, did he know and basicaly said goodbye to his wife?

Knowing her husband tried to reach her, when syhe was woith her lover, on 9/11, will haunt her until she dies.

Don't like cheaters who get away with it. But maybe her guilt will overwhelm her. Would like to see this in a longer version.

No middle ground on this one, you either love it for its originality, or hate it for what it depicts.

Kinda want to know the aftermath for her .. I have a feeling she'll be shocked but ultimately not that guilty - selfish people rationalise things away.

Poor John.

WRONG TIMING. After working in law enforcement for 36 years, if I could I'd give you a minus 50 *, I would.

Ouch!

FUCK!!!

Wow! 5 stars.

It remains unclear whether Kelly has prospects for a joint future with Richard? With sexual compatibility, as we understood, they have everything in order. But in everyday, psychological and emotional terms? Perhaps Richard is married. Maybe he's chasing married pussies. Damn it, he might just turn out to be a janitor in Kelly's office building. I hate the 750-word format - there are so many questions left!

Good story, but sad.

The dead do not speak, but also the dead do not see and do not hear. Is the author hinting that it was Kelly who organized the 9/11 terrorist attacks in order to hide the knowledge of her betrayal from her husband for sure? Tricky... Bravo, girl!

Too bad this story ended before she learned that she indirectly murdered her husband.

Is there a rule against a 750 having a 2nd chapter?

Damn, great story.

I hate 750 word stories. There is never any payoff. I need more

A sad, wrenching tragedy, made all the worse by deception. She deserves the traumatic guilt she will feel for the rest of her life. This is a well-written, economical gut punch of a story.

But she will and it will haunt her for a very long time!

4

Hopefully John will find out and divorce the slut

Let the cunt live with that. While her husband was dying she off screwing behind his back.

Clever writing.

I hope you continue this story,

Tasteless

Ok, you got me... this was really sad...

Live with that, bitch.

Damn!!!

Wow. I hope that haunts her for eternity.

Short and to the point. A very good first story. Hopefully you'll submit more.

I wonder how many people are living in guilt?

Beyond terrible. Leaves me hoping her one encounter with Richard gives her an STD that does her in. Why do so many authors of these kinds of stories always write, "She loved her husband with all her heart, but..." Such horseshoe. She's a selfish lying slut who loves only herself and now hubby is dead, she'll just find another guy to give her what she wants and she'll cheat on him as well. Horrible!!!!!!

Should have been Richard and Kelly

Kelly will either breathe a huge sigh of relief with the thought that all will be forever right in her world, or she'll feel incredible guilt at having deceived John and hearing him express his love for her at the moment he died. Of course, if she does feel guilt, who will she seek forgiveness from?

Oh my , what a story,

At least it wasn't a cuck story. Not bad for a first entry.

Oh shit! That was brutal.

Yet another idiot who writes the "I love him dearly yet want to betray and disrespect him" bullshit

If cum dump Kelly had any honor, she'd commit suicide after finding out the news...

I was hoping this was a part1 of more to come but I guess not. I gave ya 4 stars but I hate stories without a end. nice try anyway.

I wish you would made it a little longer but good story

?????????

The ultimate guilt trip and unknowing revenge. Hard to top that bit of karma! lpw

"Kelly was right, John would never know."...And she was happy he was dead, now she could fuck her lover every single day!

"brazier" - Did you mean brassier?

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My mind went the opposite direction, that they were cheating in the WTC, and just before the plane hit, she thought that John would never know.

Well done. She will have nightmares forever.

Looking forward to your next offering.

Very good - but what's next for her?

Yes? Plane Ccash? Terrorist attack? Earth quake?

Is there a second chapter coming?

Damn

And the hope is that the guilt will follow her forever and ruin her life. D

Exploiting the 9/11 terrorist attack for cheap melodrama points is pathetic.

Dude, really? Trust me, this ain't deep, it's shameful.

Tried to be clever. Missed.

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3 ***

With her lover when her husband dies. I see years of therapy ahead for her.

A different take. Glad you didn't judge

Another unpunished slut.

Very clever. As a non American it took another read to catch it. But a great debut Keep contributing.

Nicely done. A real hammer to the head.

I wonder what makes a happily married person cheat? I can understand an unhappily married person cheating but a happily married person? I don't understand why, I guess some happily married people will never know.

Great plot line. 5 Stars,

From someone who absolutely HATES 750 word short stories, this was very well done. The implied lifelong regret and remorse of Kelly, knowing she was cheating while her husband was dying, is a powerful image. Congratulations.

I wonder if this actually happened on that terrible day…. 5 years so I suspect not much residual guilt. Like a great RnR song, refrain was poetic and story was short and very sweet.

Can you get any more stupid?

And then she spent the rest of her life being the media professional victim, getting money from charities and the government for the loss of the one she betrayed without ever acknowledging her hypocrisy and betrayal.

Good writing, heart breaking story.

Good, but that last line doesn't quite work, does it? He will never know? But the implication is that he does know and has harmed himself?

Well written, but I can't decide how to score it. It's probably too short and needed the reader to hear about her desperate attempts to contact her husband and then the total pain of realising what a horrible human being she is. Then how she became a recluse after her friends and family found out what she was doing while her husband suffered. I'll give 3. It could be higher if it was a complete story.

Wow a very powerful story……

Chilling, but well done.

That packed a punch! Does she believe in an afterlife? If John goes to Heaven, will he find out of her betrayal? Or would knowing violent the definition of Heaven.

Damn. Just damn.

Dear Kelly,

i wish you a long live with this pictures every day.

Tragic story. Don’t know if appropriate… anyway, a never ending nightmare who will haunt her a life long. Suffer bitch!!!

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Whoa, that was different! Nicely done.

Oh my.

Let's hope her guilt will eat at her until she offs herself.

Warn the readers if its a 750 word "project". Many like me will not waste our time reading them.

I thought John was supposed to be at world trade tower on 9-11 in the morning when it happened but previous night he was with his lover, and saved.

He was in dilema how to inform his wife he was alive and not dead because he was cheating on her unaware of the fact that his wife was also cheating.

Similarly his wife while mourning his husbands death, comes to know he was alive because he was cheating on her when she herself was cheating him.....

9-11 in heading gave it away for the smart people. Not me, of course. 5 Stars!

I knew there was another thing fucked up with this story. You said '846 EST' WRONG, YOU ASSHOLE. On September 11th, it would have been EDT.

I don't get the ending. Did I miss something?

Well, I’m crying…must be good 5*+

Hmmm. Not sure about this. I felt uncomfortable reading it.

Good story let the cunt choke on that the rest of her life

A very different take...when John tells Kelly he wants her to be happy,is that the last wish of a man who knows he is going to die or is he telling her he knows what she is doing and is telling her in a sense that he is glad he is dying because now she can be free to enjoy other men since he was just in the way..which is a guilt trip? Only the author knows. Two colleagues of mine were at an industry thing on 9/11 at Windows on the World and died there. One thing I can tell you, if John was able to get through he was lucky, once the towers were hit the cell phone circuits were all overloaded with ppl calling.

Powerful story-telling!

oooh, dark, the kernel of a good story, but too short.

"Kelly, after five years of marriage was ready for an adventure. She loved her husband John, and was not dissatisfied with him either as a husband or a lover" this statement in a cheating story is the culmination of a stupid story! The only hope left is that the whore will be mentally broken by her cheating for life!

Amazing how many commenters had the ending sail right over their heads.

This quick story leaves room for continuing the story on how the bitch burnt herself and somehow succeeds or fails in finding redemption.

WTF? Should change the title to "How being a cheating slut saved my life" as that is what it really implies.

Good effort for your first story.

I wish you had made it longer and included the aftermath of losing John and what happened with her relationship with Richard

Wow, just, wow. Tears.

She packed her brazier. Can you fit one in a suitcase? Was she a cook?

A parcel of emotions with this one. Up until the end I was ready to slap this one down because it needed to be a longer story. The last two sentences changed all of that. A twist that changed this from a 3 star to 5 star rating.

Another cheating cunt, who will probably never even feel guilt or loss, gets away clean. Really good first story mixing cheating with tragedy. I would like to read a story where the collapsing twin towers somehow pick off the bitch and Richard too.

Hopefully the guilt will move her to toss her lying cheating ass out of the 20th story window sometime in the next day or so. Terrible on every level!

Needs wotk

What a dark story !

Sort of a good start, and then just dropped off into the nothingness of unknown!

Your preface into just wetted our appetites', and then??????

Was this a 750 word attempt, or something potentially bigger and better that just didn't have the potential?

How about a rewrite?

New and improved!

Some facts - like the 9/11 date for sure and expand from there.

Did John make it down and out, or did he make it up into the light?

Obviously we will never know!

And what about the slut cheater and Richard??

Soooo much opportunity and sooo much lost!

Wow. Just wow! 5*