All Comments on 'Jonas Agonistes'

An excellent story once again very well plotted and presented, my only criticism (actually the wrong word) is I would have liked to have seen the Captain bought to answer.

Loved the story! You get a virtual 6th star for setting it in my stomping grounds. Been to that Joseph-Beth a fair few times, and am not far from Fairfield and Lindenwald.

The author has developed a body of work that is quite impressive…including this story. This is my second time through and it’s still quite moving. My only complaint is the rate at which new stories appear…and a bit that the 2021 story didn’t meet my expectations for this author. But fortunately, I’ve got more of the author’s stories to re-read! Thanks!

I had a tear in my at the wedding, seeing that Turkish and Healy were there.

What an excellent story. Unique!

Well worth the 5/5 l gave it.

What a superb story. It’s very well written. I’m impressed for the time and effort Malraux spends researching and preparing to write his stories.

Thank you

Most of the Tim I wish we had the option to rate a story 4.5. Not this one. 5 huge stars

Incredible, just incredible! The characters are deep, well fleshed out and very real indeed. The storytelling is masterful, the emotions raw and real, the story line compelling! The topic is a genuine issue dealt with tact, sensitivity and passion. A fantastic read!

What a wonderful story. I hope that you are using your writing talents for more then than just this site.

Wow. Just wow.

Your stories here are truly works of art.

I mean it. It's not obsequious praise or flattery. This and the other handful of stories you have here are truly some of the best to be found on this site.

Excellent.

This may be the best story on this sight 5 stars

Great Great Great 5 STARS ! Very moving and heartfelt.

Terrific story about a "wounded warrior" who struggles to overcome the tramatic events he suffered in as a Marine in Afghanistan, finally meeting the girl of his dreams whose love and patience helps him heal and become a complete man again.

This story and 'Save One Love' are most likely your best works on this site. Keep up the great work!

Off the charts great. Powerful, compelling, and honorable. Many important life lessons. Honor is never out of vogue.

. Semper Fidelis, Marine.

Superlatives fail me. Splendid. Compelling. Heart-breaking and heart-mending.

Well done, and thank you for sharing your work with us readers.

I had to read the whole thing in one sitting. Finally, off to the loo! ;)

I concur with minnygopher! Excellent story. Superlatives fail me... chapter 2 perhaps? Thank you for telling the story of those who refuse to bend in the face of "the military way". Thank you, tsgtcapt, usaf-retired.

Damn it! Making my eyes start sweating over a bunch of jarhead stuff. Hell, empathy for a Marine?!

Damn fine writing. Although I find your phrasing and word choice 'unique' at times. You must have a very intriguing speech pattern.

A wonderful story. It really went to my heart. It's probably the best story I've read on

literotica and I've read hundreds of them.

Oh shxt oh dear. Vietnam era. Read a lot, remember Callie and My Lai.

This was fantastic. Justice to a horrible situation generated by REMF's.

Thanks

I was very impressed with your taking this story topic and addressing its issues in such an understanding manner that we could all understand. You made your characters come to life. Giving it only a top grade of 5 does not address how good it really was. Thank you for sharing your story. A ‘10” indeed!

l loved it, but gave it 4 Stars instead of the 5 I was going to give it because he groom was in black which is a mourning color and not appropriate for a wedding.

While I'm giving it all 5 stars, I agree that black should have been either a dress uniform or a complimentary blue. This story also needs another chapter or two. Love it!

Excellent writing.allof your work is great, Semper Fi.

My 2nd or 3td reading. So good on so many levels. Your other stories are excellent too, like Shooting at Merciful Lord.

Another excellent story of Jonas Simms. Just read the previous one with him as a Professor. Both outstanding writings!!

Would have been nice with him having a get together of his army buddies who looked out for him!!

Would have been better if those platoon commander and bastards above him were investigated for the murders, including Alvy!!!

Thank you for a wonderful, moving story!

Forgot I was on literotica.

What a wonderful story! I had tears in my eyes, so moving and touching, thank you!

There have been separate cases involving both the New Zealand and Australian SAS actions which resulted in non-combatants' deaths in Afghanistan. So please don't hold the US as being the only country causing unnecessary civilian deaths. War is stupid and once you are involved in a war morality is very easily lost. Principles give way to expediency and revenge turns into headcounts.

Great story woven about an all too believable event with tenderly drawn characters.!

Wow.

Thanks for writing that.

Read and reread, Outstanding! This from an old Marine, although not of this war, saw questionable orders given and followed!

The military is not that much different from the rest of the world. Advancement depends more on time in grade, ass kissing, politicking and height than compassion, thoughtfulness and openness to contrary opinions.

LMJ

So well done. Thank you.

lawful orders can be denied based on safety concerns and certain circumstances, with a slight penalty.

Direct orders are to be followed to the T or face penalties based on the UCMJ laws

Prior military (retired) here

4⭐️ story ,,, lacking another character or epilogue for what there lives entitled after the ceremony of the marriage

Excellent and then some. Very heavy. I can relate - a Viet Nam vet with declining PTSD.

Just an excellent story. Well done Marine.

A number of people here waxing eloquent about how Marines swear to follow orders. Having taken the oath as an officer myself, I know exactly what it says. Here, in total, is the oath of office of a Marine officer "I, [name], do solemnly swear (or affirm) that I will support and defend the Constitution of the United States against all enemies, foreign and domestic; that I will bear true faith and allegiance to the same; that I take this obligation freely, without any mental reservation or purpose of evasion; and that I will well and faithfully discharge the duties of the office on which I am about to enter. So, help me God.”. The question of illegal orders is dealt with at length in training, literature, and elsewhere. I never hard an illegal oder. Dumb ones, bad ones, wrong ones, yes, but not illegal. Those are so rare that a diligent researcher could probably list every one given in the past 50 years or so.

Great story! I also enjoyed reading all the related Sky Grey stories - I hope there are more to come!

Incredibly powerful. Thank you.

One of my favorites. Thank you for your works.

Not enough romance in this. don't know it was even there. Other wise it was good story.

Absolutely brilliant. Among the top ten on Literotica. I don't, can't and won't rank them anymore than Jonah would rank atrocities. Five hypernovas is not enough.

THANK YOU FOR YOUR SERVICE. I was transported to a world that I am ignorant of in my sheltered life. But ! I have enough respect for what you must have lived to be able to write this story.

As a writer, you are very talented. Characterization is excellent. Dialogue moves the story right along. Very descriptive. A well rounded story. Again, THANK YOU. And CONGRATS on a 5 STARS story.

Sheer literary power writing. Wonderfully sustained. Five stars.

I may not have been a grunt, but this took me back to my two trips to that region. Excellent writing.

Great story I kinda wish the two that got promoted got investigated and stripped

Wow! Powerful! 'nuff said.

Ten supernovas out of five stars.

Have read this and others by this author. Enjoyed every one. Been a while since last one was posted.

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

Excellent, even for my 3td time reading

Seeing as he just met 2 of his team members, they needed more written about them going forward. What happened to the asshole that was promoted for his "guns blazin"

I have said it before and will say it again, "Absolutely and utterly powerful".

Thanks, again, another great read-through. Read to my wife,this time, and she enjoyed, also. Thank you.

Wow! This story deserves much wider publication!

Oh my god! That was amazing. I remember emailing my nephew when he was deployed to Afghanistan so soon after Sept. 11th. I told him that anything he had to do was on my soul and the nation that asked him to go. We didn’t discuss personal responsibility, but I’ve always had great faith in his morals. Fortunately, he came home in good shape, physically and emotionally. Thank you for writing this.

Amazing story. Five stars everyday.

I was an army paratrooper and I've had love ,hate thoughts of my time in service.

I hate that any large organization will sacrifice individuals for the supposed good of the whole. What is the limit?

This is, In all honesty, one of the most moving pieces of literature I have read in a long time, and I read a lot. Stunningly good.