All Comments on 'Judy and the Handyman 05'

*****Like a virgin for the very first time in a long time!! Good read very real. Thanks for sharing. Madonna could do the sound track!!!

You totally lost it when you switched narratives. You said it would be in first person, and was for all of two sentences and then switched to second person. That is probably the worst way to write a story. Telling a reader “you did this” or “you said this” simply alienates them from the story, as immediately their mind says, no I didn’t. The story was perfectly fine the way you wrote the first four chapters.