All Comments on 'Jules 01 - Game On!'

this is so erotic

This is a wonderful setup for what I can imagine following. Can't wait to see "the game" develop and the growth of the main character. Please publish the next story fast!!

I liked the story. It was very well written. However, a tad ridiculous that it takes place in a busy Cafe. As if no one would say anything. Plus, the PDA's of another woman practically laying over another, carressing her arms and shoulders and pulling off buttons off her blouse/shirt... well, you get the picture. However, as a fantasy type, it was excellent. Cheers.

Thanks everyone for taking the time to read and comment. I have several more chapters already written which I'll be submitting over the next few days. I just wanted to use the first one to figure out the Literorica platform. @LenardSpencer, thanks for the feedback. Some of your concerns are addressed later in the story, but overall it's all in the "ain't gonna happen in reality" camp. I hope you can enjoy it for what it is. -FoF

Wish you would take that further. Very sexy.

Hot in a restrained way.