All Comments on 'Julie & Daddy Step Out'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 years ago

Please stick with one perspective. At first I was reading about two people and next thing I know I’m being told what “I” did. Spoiled the whole story.

topcattoponetopcattoponealmost 5 years ago
Good story....

....but. There is a disconcerting switch from third person to second person in the middle which spoils the effect somewhat.

GayleypooGayleypooabout 18 years ago
wow!

This is hotter than the last!

Hope the story continues!

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