All Comments on 'Julie's New Houseboy Ch. 05: Final'

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ZakfarZakfarover 4 years ago
Pacing problem.

You went too slow in mid chapters. But then ended the story in haste. Your chapter 1 was really good. I know you wrote it long ago. But if you ever revise this story, bring better pacing to it. Last chapter could have lot more material and should have gone slowly.

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