All Comments on 'June and her kids'

just right to mak the mind work

Nice and quite exciting. As you said in your profile you don’t write sex in detail. I think It won’t hurt to add a little bit of it. Just a short exciting detail is enough. Unlike some other stories that the sex details are so lengthy almost two pages long and becoming so boring.

That was sad and you shouldn't keep writing if that's the best you can do...seriously.

Waiting for them to fuck!

"that was sad" to the mysterious anonymous:

If you didn't like it, why did you read it and comment? It may have not suited you but sometimes these shorter stories are great. I enjoyed it, tho it could have been longer, but as a short it was damn good! Why don't you man up and write your own stories then?

Perhaps you have a voice to text program, or just let your spellchecker have its way with what you write/type

". . . relief some tension," relieve some tension

June was a silent comer? Perhaps cummer ?

This is a good essay covering a predominantly forbidden topic. Well done

Proof Reading should have caught these, and other irregularities. If you cannot source a Proof Reader, or an editor I offer something I have seen offered here on Literotica.com

Record yourself reading your story, then play it back. While playing back your recording watch the words on your monitor. Are those the words you intended, where you wanted them? This will assist in a self Proof Read.

Did wonder how a young lady that had only had sex twice, and then not with a proficient lover, had become so adept with familial partners.