by SAbitch
I was so happy to find this story on here this morning, I love how its turned out !! Now I'm just sad its already finished. Can't wait to see Ch. 04 :D
That was worth waitin for ! Please write another chapter soon , you are truly amazing
Damn, this is such a fucking sad story... Hopefully Natalie & Ashley will be able to heal one another in the future.
WOW IS ALL I CAN SAY U DONE IT AGAIN
VERY VERY INTERESTING I LOVED IT
I searched every couple of days for the next chapter and its finaly here! this should b a movie. i know id watch it. this story is close to my heart. i hope the next chapter is soon to come. :)
If there was a sixth star I'd gladly give it to you! Very well written, powerful emotions and I'm particularly mesmerized by the "darker" parts of your story. Very well done!
Thank you for the opening and the story. Evokes tears. Well written.
There were quite a few errors in this one that made it hard for me to stay focused on the story. For instance:
"Ashley was pulled out of her trans" - do you mean trance?
"tried to soothe the her"
"the neighbors heard m screams"
"murder and stationary rape" - do you mean statutory rape?
Baby......ok I read it. It's good.....but there were parts that scared me. I don't know if I can talk to you about it or even if I should.
Such a deep story. I looked every few days for this chapter, I really can't wait for the next one. Love your work, keep it up
First off, thanks for all the comments and feedback I have received so far!!
Secondly, I am well aware of the grammar/ spelling mistakes, like I said in my notes, my editor was unavailable. Shit happens sometimes and we make the best of it!
Thirdly, sorry baby, I did kinda warn you :). Just glad that you finally read it!! Love ya
And may I say this is worth the wait indeed! thank you so much SAbitch,you just made my day.salute your writing skills.(cinder)
This was well worth the wait, may I just ask you when the next chapters will be out please ? I can't wait to find out what happens. Thank you x
I've been hanging on to every word!!!
I cannot wait for the next chapter!!!!
Amazing!
I really like your story and writing, but is there ever going to be a 4th chapter ? I check every couple of days to see, and there never is
I guess this is the last we're seeing from this story. I pray not though! It's to brilliant to be left unfinished. I hope you're doing okay. Update as soon as you can. Soon, being the operative word. Lol.
great story...so far the best on literotica ..i m an avid luv story reader here on literotica..there shud b more of it..the best part was that your story had a good plot..a little scary at times bt definitely good...infact i should say fantastic..i feel lik this is the last chapter..but it wud be nice if u made a sequel and gave us the story of ashly and natalie..but even then thnku very much for writing this..gave me hope during one of the worst times in my life :)
What's up litsters? I am working hard on Part 4, I have just suffered from a serious bout of writers block, but I promise not to keep you waiting too much longer. *Spoiler Alert* This time we learn a little more about our mysterious doctor. Happy reading!
Best story in literotica, so so touching. You are a good writer. More effort needed when editing. Great work.
As one of the chief nit-pickers here, I just want to say that your stories are wonderful, and unlike much of the dreck here, well worth wading through the errors.
Because of the quality of the stories, and in spite of the errors I have been giving you 5-stars. It's just that they would be that much better without the errors, and I'm sure you're turning off some readers who would really enjoy your stories.
this keeps getting better and better and you are right drugs are never the answer, they just cause more problems
Just thank you for this chapter ....... Drugs or pills or alcohol are the shorttime "healing" option until the users turn to junkies or alcies or just sick braindead ones ....... Its sooooooo damn hard to heal your soul, doesn't matter which pain hurt crash injured you, sometimes it becomes unbearable and then this helplessness grows into the final move to end this life ( unfortunately own experience) ....... But out of this prospect, own one, i u derstand your script fully and if there is some connection to hour own RL then i wish you all the luck and power to see the dayly sunlight and to hear the laughter to smell the flowers to love ....... Thank you for this marvelous story