by Jayleen88
I love the creativity of this story. So glad I happened to find it :)
I find myself agreeing w/ an anon!
--- while a little anoying, the gramer and misspellings are no worse then other stories where they reseaved no comment. plus this is an older contributation to the site! yelling abought the gramer now is the old yarn of the horse and the barn door...
would.it.kill some of u just to read the damn story? if u cant do the gtfo. i never knew so many english professors on this site
Your story is great, but your misuse of grammar (especially prepositions) is driving me loony!
It's been a while since I've last logged in...been busy with revision and stuff haha... THANK YOU for all the wonderful comments and compliments!!
I'm going to be really sad when you end this. I just want it to keep going on forever. It's very touching. Keep it coming
To: "Spearman1, weinnachfest, catori1, Anonymous in usa, Anonymous and Anonymous".....More chapters are coming soon! GOOD NEWS - I've completed CHAPTER 8 and is now working on CHAPTER 9. I hope you guys will love the new development as well as the twist and turns... (HEHE)Keep VOTING and COMMENTING!!
Hope to see the next chapter very soon!!! Would like to see the bitches fight together but its not my story hihi KEEP IT UP!!!
Damn its so hard to find good werewolf stories these days and thank god i found THIS!!!!
I'm loving how fast you write too! keep up the good work, write soon too, the suspense is killing me!
I must admitt i read chapters 1-5 and since i am a fan of Lupine stories this rocks! I love the humanity in it all, and Jerry just typical.... James has the balls to go after what he wants and Jerry cant stand it hehe!! I cant wait to read more.
Ok!! Can Gracielle please rip Jerry's throat out!! Someboby needs to tear his freaking throat out!! Just let someone go straight wolfy on the SOB PLEASE!!Uugh!! His has pissed me off so bad in this story and to think I started off feeling sorry for the fucker! Great story.
I hope you'll love the next chapters!! Thanks for VOTING & COMMENTING!! I still love the way you summed up Gracielle and James's names into ONE - - - "JAMIELLE" - - - totally COOL...
As a rule I don't like wolf stories. Kate Douglas' wolf stories were the only ones I enjoyed until now.
Your stories rank right up there!
I love it!
You're welcome!! :D Keep on VOTING and COMMENTING!! THANK YOU GUYS!!
Omg I'm at the edge of me seat here, can't wait to read more. Fantastic!!!
Oh yes I agree. It definitely is time Gracie kicked that mangy butt like he's never felt it before. Awesome story. And a BIG Thank you for the daily updates.
LOL, don't worry, I'm not offended at all :D Your guess is absolutely right, English is my second language. I admit this on CHAPTER 2 comment LOL...I've posted a number of chapters already (until chapter 7) so I couldn't go back and re-edit them with my editor (Yes, I finally found an editor - I'm a VERY big fan of her work so I'm really honoured that she wanted to help me. I'm writing CHAPTER 8 at the moment and I'll definitely send the story to her for editing... THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR VOTING and COMMENTING!! :D
The plot and characters of your story are great - classic romantic theme, great personalities, very engaging, good tension, good chronology - as a storyteller you are quite good.
But your writing, from a technical perspective, is all over the place. Your sentence structure is often a mess, you aren't careful about your tenses and grammar and often the reader has to try to decipher what you're trying to say – so when I am reading your story, often I’m wondering if there is some detail that I haven’t understood – as your word order and structure can be confusing. I'm hazarding a guess that English isn't your native language - and if that is indeed the case, then it's understandable... but then it would seem to me that you'd try to write more carefully and that you would take advantage of the assistance available in the Literotica forum. There is quite a bit of excellent editorial support, and with a little of that I think you can improve from being a great story teller to becoming an excellent writer. I hope I have helped and that I haven't offended you. I really do like your story, and I'd like to see more submissions from you.
ALL of you guys have been amazingly SUPPORTIVE!! Thank you for VOTING and COMMENTING!! I've posted CHAPTER 7 today - YAY!!! I'm now working on CHAPTER 8. BTW, this may sound funny but what does DOUCHEBAG means? HAHA, I can't find it in my dictionary... I feel stupid LOL
LOOVEE IT! I'm just wondering if the word DOUCHEBAG comes to anyone elses mind when they think of Jerry??? Cuz i definitely think the name suits him....Douchebag Jerry! :-D
i loved this chapter and after reading it i have changed my mind on who she should end up with...i'm not liking jerry at all anymore..wtf is going on with him.....he has become a complete lunatic....i think james is the better person for her and you can see that he truely loves gracielle....i'm on the james and gracielle bandwagon now....at least after this chapter i am...can't wait to read the rest....maybe i'll be surprised again...boy this roller coaster we are on. besides no matter how sad or mad jerry is acting if he truly loves gracielle he would not treat her family like that...that turned him off for me. i guess i'll have to see how this plays out in the future chapters!