All Comments on 'Kahana Hula Tiki Bar'

A very interesting story line. I really liked how the flash back set reason for his need of a BBW. (Damn that was said awkwardly)

Please consider this as constructive criticism.You know and use a lot of words. You seem to me to have potential. I think you could string them together better. I would recommend you read some of John D. McDonald's books.

The Travis McGee series is pretty good but I really like his other books. Especially "A Flash of Green" and "The brass Cupcake".For just plane writing skills and ability I think he is the best "Word Smith" I have read.

Since he is gone now you should be able to pick hes stuff up pretty cheap in a used book store.

Just my 2 cents worth.

Mike S.

Wonderful story. Not just sex, but a true understanding of what life is all about. I will look for more of your stories.