All Comments on 'Kansas City Embassy Suites'

seems I read this years back, I remember it because I live in KC

I Absolutely have begged my Wife to participate in this same adventure, So glad it worked for you 2.....Mine [wife] won't !

Any help appreciated.....

You need to hire an editor. The storyline is fine, but the writing.....ouch.

I think your critics were way too hard on you. Sure it could ha e used some editing but the story line went where it needed to. I'm glad you didn't go into all the bodily descriptions that so many do. It let me use my imagination. I gave it 4 Stars but it was deserving of a 4.6.