All Comments on 'Katrina Ch. 01'

Can't wait for next installment

You have started well, a bit long but you kept my interest. Now already looking forward to continuing naughty adventures for Katrina. Please ensure someone else gets to slowly proof read before you post. There are a couple minor English issues which don't bother me but some others, not used to international English, may be more harsh in their review. Keep going, I want to experience your story 😉

Katrina is an Indian from South India where English is not her first language. Suddenly, she has been asked to write this major story and she is struggling a bit. I wanted to show this in my first few stories so I've purposely left errors that I've heard Indian's make. I've even seen in Malaysia how this bad grammar is even taught in schools.

Please over look this as once Katrina learns and gets more practice at writing, she will do a lot better. I hope this doesn't distract you from the point of this story.

SexySue,

This is an unexpected jewel of a story, I loved every moment. The struggles in English gave it an air of authenticity, and Katrina's innocent but adventurous character came through nicely. I'll be following this series for sure, looking forward to it.

Word clarity: Accepting: (receiving) EXcepting: (leaving out...separating)

Lovely story. Especially admire how you retained her character voice.

I loved the story of the sexual awakening of your beautiful young character. Your writing is excellent. Your descriptions are so vivid and clear that I felt as if I was standing right next to Katrina and watching her. Thank you for the great story and I can't wait to read the next one!