All Comments on 'Kevin and Sister Charlotte's First'

This is a classic fantasy, and it was far, far too short. You write well though, just needs some polishing. Looking forward to more.

So, he was uncut then? I ask, because you repeated it, despite this outline of a story being comically short and devoid of other details.

More femdom smoking please

you hve bgot to follow up on this.

If I may ... it seems to Me that you rushed through a very erotic scenario to get straight to the obvious. Don't worry about your reader being put off if a story is too long, write for you and enjoy giving the detail, the reader will stay if it's interesting. Perhaps proof read it before publishing too.

If you can edit it, add the suspense and build it. Don't be so quick to get the cock in her mouth perhaps.