All Comments on 'Kieron Ch. 01: Seductive Sister'

Great so far. I love how Sasha, Bridgette, and Jacob from Jacob’s story are mentioned. Sasha is obviously Missy’s submissive. All sorts of possibilities here.

Isn’t Paul Jacob”s new master? And it seems that he will become the owner of Kieran’s employer, Mashup Recruitment under very strange circumstances. I love the intermixing of stories and characters. So Missy is Sasha’s lesbian master and is now fucking her brother’s huge cock. Fabulous. I look forward to where this story is headed.

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A great story but the ending was poor

DIid she end up pregnancy with all the cum he put inside her pussy ???

Please add part 2

Epilogue? No indication this story is from another series, else I would have read it in order. Somewhat stands alone, but not really 😕

Please give us a pt 2!!

"He never defended her actions, especially when Missy and her mates through milkshake over Oliver at school.!

NO!!

THREW!

Good story. Lots of grammar problems. Poor choice of the tense of words such as you wrote lay when the tense should have been laid or laying. Fix up the mistakes and I'll give you 5 stars. 4 for now but subject to change. Keep writing. The premise is hot, hot, hot!