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And . . . And by that I mean . . .

Please, please, please, reread/proof read your work. There were a tremendous number of dropped/missing words. I have seen a suggestion byo another comment or which is think is an excellent idea. Record yourself reading/proof reading your work. THEN, listen to the recording while reading along in the story. The missing/dropped words will become visible, grammar slips will show themselves, tense irregularities will pop up.

You display SO MUCH POTENTIAL FOR THIS CRAFT, please help yourself improve your offerings.

Call me a fan.