All Comments on 'Kim Driver: Graduation Ch. 02'

Cut in at least in half, and as the previous person said it would cut down on the repeating of the same words over and over. Gave you a 4 for the potential in the future.

It was so long the limited number of four lettered words became repititious and boring. Also, things such as "hear comes the team--", "straiten up--", and "under ware" were off putting. I almost stopped at the first page over that. You could tighten the story up, remove about 3 pages and have a winner.