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All Comments on 'Kinetic: The First Alliance Ch. 02 Pt. 02'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
good start

You jumped into the main plot a bit too quickly if you wanted to keep the chapters short. Key to a good story is patience.

Also, you hit the teen attitude perfectly, I wanted to throttle him too.

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