All Comments on 'King of the Valkyries Ch. 01'

An interesting start/ Looking forward to seeing where it goes from here.

Yes! Strong women made to serve! Power reversal!

Good story! you could do better without the Literotica dot dot dots. I've coached a few Authors here and asked them to load their text into a text reader such as Text Aloud, they no longer use the dots after claiming it indicating a pause. Isn't that in the words and the thoughts of the reader? Also when I taught College level English Lit. I found that writer loved to combine words and the Lit rule has always been that if the word can be used as two words it should not be a compound word. Fuckhead is Fuck Head, Asshole is Ass hole, so on and so forth! However I liked the plot very much and will continue reading your Chapter 2. 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS! Thanks.