Kiss of the Moon

I was very interested to begin with, but as the chapter went along it became more difficult to follow who was speaking when. This story is also in bad need of a proof reader, grammar errors are to be expected but this one has numerous. Proof reader and editor is needed to better engross ur audience into the world you have created.

I love the start of the story. I am looking forward to its continuation. You really do need an editor. For one example, it is spelled “Sub-dural hematoma.

Interesting premise held back by horrendous grammar. I'm hoping part 2 is better.

The bones of this story have promise, however it’s just so hard to read - readers are constantly back checking to see who is speaking, as the speech marks close onto the listener’s reaction, I’m really hoping this is just a formatting issue that gets resolved in a chapter or twos time, if it isn’t it’s shoddy writing. Beyond frustrating. 3⭐️

I was hoping for a good story but this one is too difficult to read. It's hard to know who is speaking at times and the thread is just too jerky. I don't deduct for typos, but there were several that should have been caught by a proof reader. Sorry

Love the warm fuzziness of love, the sexual tension & explosive description of consummation. Shuddering just thinking of it.

I really enjoyed this story it's better than some I pay for!

My second time reading your stories. I enjoy your writing, appreciate your storylines, and have fallen in love with your characters.

This is my second time reading this on Literotica. I wanted to read the original this time in lieu of the edited version on wattpad. There are parts here that are not in the wattpad version. I know that it is edited there, but I kinda miss the parts that are still here. some of my favorite stories from wattpad ( other than your series which I love ) are some of madox and Paying for his Mistakes, which was phenominal until the writer decided to edit but took the whole story down and is now stuck at 8 chapters. such a waste of a really really great tale! There was another that I just saw called the innocent omega, which while it is only one chapter is a very sad rejection story. I do reccomend it if you are up to reading it. The other story that I liked alot, was The Others, by elaine M Roberts. She has since removed it from wattpad and is selling it on amazon. while it is still a decent tale, she too edited it to the point that it is now more of a Nora Roberts type and has lost much of what made the story so unique as well as removing some of the extra plot twists that made it great. This is just my honest opinion. In any event, please continue with your lost stories or maybe a whole new novel if you have the time and inclination to do so.

Thank you for all of your stories as they are truly great.

wolfgang seems like a dick. He beats women in his pack for speaking up, and encourages their dads to do so. Not sexy.