All Comments on 'Kissin Cousins'

Too bad you ruined a great story, with the bullshit of a 8.5" cock, which is physically impossible.. Average is 3.5 to 5" maximum is 6". Granted the story is fake, but at least learn something about anatomy, and write with in the confines of believable.

brilliant

This needs more parts to the story. Him fucking all her friends .

Terrible writer

Loved the storyline, but you need an editor something awful!

Is the author a 12 year old horny boy? That would not excuse the number of errors. Someone should send the author a definition of proofreader and what they do.

Sorry, but please look up how to write conversation. Lack of punctuation along with the back and forth between characters without said punctuation, had me lost. Couldn’t make it through it.

Not much, America's education system doesn't seem to teach English anymore. Missing prepositions, the, "then I did and then I did that" style was just plain hard to read.

Please get an editor.

Fantastic hot story, especially for your first, I hope to read more of these two being together and hopefully he gets to fill her pussy real soon. Please keep writing

First, whichever moron said there is no such thing as an 8.5 inch cock, good god man, I have that much, and if your girl believes you when you say that, I feel sorry for her. Next, Nate, the story is fun, but as others have mentioned, your writing style leaves a bit to be desired. I am not great either, so I will direct you to another author on this site, Shakna, and if you read some of her work, you can learn a lot about how to fix your errors. Example…using your own text below

At breakfast the next morning, Pam asked her dad if he still was looking for help at his job site.

“I'm always looking for good help, why do you ask?” He replied.

Pam quickly responded. “Well, Michael is looking for a job and I thought that maybe you could hire him and he could stay with us at least for a while.”

It's just too much to endure when the writer says shuttered instead of shuddered. I quit reading right then. I knew it would only get worse.

Many writing errors. Story has possibilities but needs improvement.

There are these new things called quotation marks. They go at either end of what people are saying in a story. They look like this - “”. I think they will revolutionize writing stories.