All Comments on 'Lapdancing Girlfriend Ch. 05'

It's super appropriate I finished this story on April Fool's Day, because I honestly thought after making it 49 pages of this story I would be rewarded with _something_ redeeming, like chuck getting caught. But no, jokes on me. Towards the the end of the story I was just hoping Jen (Diamond) would somehow end up giving Dan a pity fuck. Oh well, not gonna lie, this story is gonna leave an emotional mark for a while, just a little too much for me.

My one unanswered question here is was Special Agent Geiger sincere about his desire to look into Mr. Dewight's business or was he, like Nick, just in it to eventually get his piece of the pie. If he was sincere why did he never come by to give Jen the support she needed or in fact why was he never mentioned again? I figure he would have been coming up in later chapters but it seems like there should have been an appearance in one of these later chapters.

I'm offering solutions and asking for responses, even if criticism; Or maybe I'm alone thinking this story was Truly literary Genius?

But maybe it's true that once you die, you're forgotten almost instantly? I died (Technically, Medically, No brainwaves for 22hrs, in 2010) & my family was embarrassed to get a call from me 8dys after them being told by my sister to get to AZ to see me before my DNR order was carried out: Nevermind, TMI.

Do I need to become an author?

Oh, I forgot:

You're Welcome.

Ok, here's your ending;

First you need to listen to "One Headlight" by the Wallflowers until it makes you CRY to hear the words.

Now!; Jen gets Murdered in front of the FBI SURVEILLANCE cams for pissing off the boss by revealing the plan, the Company gets dropped into Dan's lap by the Agency to monitor future industry corruption, and he devotes his life and position to carrying out her mission to empower the sex workers rights:

Story DONE.

Well, not even referring to Porn in general, I think this has been an INCREDIBLE Literary journey, and if the author has in fact died, and the story won't be finished, it's a genuine Tragedy,(!!!) And the readers need to be told in no uncertain terms.

It says updated on oct 31st,2022; Is this work being completed or is the author, (as another commenter stated) in fact Dead?!?...I haven't wanted to read the end of a story so much since I read the original "JAWS" book IN 1975!!!...

When will the other chapter come out

I now know that docCIS has died. Even so I really didn't like the direction this story was heading. The guy's fiancee is getting sexually exploited by parties on all sides and he's being treated like dirt!! I don't know what the author's endgame was in all this, but it was looking like Jen would end up as a braindead cum-dumpster for the rest of her days. It was probably a mercy that this story was never finished. Dan's life was ruined and everyone else thought it was funny. There would never have been any real justice for him. Oh, well.

docCIS didn't abandon the story, he sadly passed away a few years ago.

this one had/has potential. too bad the author abandoned it .. soo many ideas. guess it was just too much work. what a shame

I would love to buy this and other DocCis stories. Can someone please let me know where I can get them? If they aren’t available anymore, I would be happy to trade. I have a large number of stories purchased so can trade some of those.

Email me at story_trader at protonmail dot com. Thanks

I would love to buy this and other DocCis stories if they are still available and someone can post a link. If not available, I have stories from other authors I have bought which I would be glad to exchange. I can be reached at story_trader at protonmail dt com.

Thanks

I'm one of the fans that Doccis bounces his idea off. I actually have the full-outline of Lap. Was supposed to keep it under wraps. But since Doccis has passed, I think it would offer some closure. (Honestly I'm surprised by the comments...so people still check here).

Ok....here goes.

The big one. Chuck already knows Dan and Jen work for the FBI. There are lots of twists and red herrings in chap 6-8. In chap 7....there is a nice one. Chuck plays Dan and Diamond by telling each he will throw Dan a bachelor party. Dan thinking Jen will perform at his stag party, and Jen thinking the same. But when the lights come on...Dan finds Mary dancing for him...and Jen finds herself in a room full of black football players for the city's team.

In the end Jen does get married in Chapter 8. However Chuck surprises her by showing up. He then lets her know that he has always known...and he got a kick seeing his buddy's fiancé get fucked by hundreds of people (you get the idea the situations Jen goes through in chap 6-8). He and the original workers of Jen's club gang bangs her....Chuck finally walking Jen down the isle in a slutty wedding dress with cum oozing out of both her nether region. Dan is shocked.

Chap 9 is a little weird. I never got to discuss with Doccis why....but Dan and Jen are rushed off to a private island honeymoon where Chuck arranges Dan to get cock blocked at every turn while Jen is exploited in numerous situation. It ends with them flying back without having consummated their marriage but Jen taken by more than 2 dozen or so guys.

Chap 10 was a short summary details not really fleshed out. But Chuck is put behind bars....Dan and Jen are in a witness protection program. Jen got a breast reduction surgery, and cut her hair short. It ends with Jen finding life boring....and servicing the FBI agents on monthly trysts under the guise of personal "FBI briefings" out of town.

There....I hope that gives some closure to everyone.

Lapdancing Girlfriend is probably one of my top 5 story series of all time. I read about DocCIS's passing on some of the 3D imaging websites last December and was saddened to hear the news. Fantastic author! I will always appreciate the time he took to place his thoughts into his writings!

There are always going to be trolls leaving negative comments but you will notice how they are always anonymous. I would love to see their submissions lol.

I believe that Chuck knows exactly what Jen is to Dan and is playing with him. It woudln't surprise me if he has the FBI guys in his pocket too. Unfortunately we will never know. RIP.

PS: I hope that DocCIS's great body of work that must surely hide behind the paywall will one day be available to the general public.

Mari55

Sorry we'll never see the end of this saga, and find out once and for all what the "full production settings" were that were greenlit.

Maybe one day his editors will be able to release what was completed before his passing.

I am so hooked on this story....any chance someone can step up to finish what Doccis started?

Sadly, the author recently passed away, so this is likely the final chapter in the saga.

To see if Dan finally kills himself or becomes a happy cuck whoring out his fiance.

Poor Diamond and her amazing libido. Writer never skips a beat describing Diamond's turmoil vs being the best spokesmodel for her girls. At 49 pages I thought this would be the end - where will it end and what's in store for Chuck? I hope the Company has a great medical plan for Dan's therapy. I enjoy this.9

At first I liked the story, it starts challenging. But from the moment this FBI guy vistits the couple, the plot turns into weird crap, nothing truly erotic anymore.

This is seriously fucked up. I'd elaborate, but the longer I spend contemplating the vile, twisted darkness of this work, the quicker I feel my brain cells dying and my emotions getting darker. So I'll leave it at that. I recommend that the author hug a fluffy bunny rabbit. Then vow never to write fiction again. Jesus...and some people are *aroused* by this?! What the fuck...

I have my own ideas on how this may end, but no reason to have a spoiler here. Great plot. Makes me want to try some longer stories I usually pass on. Anxiously await your putting the wraps on this before I forget where we are in this story. Definitely a 5Star favorite story, favorite author.

I didn't really lie...but my focus has turned currently towards self-publishing my first book...once I get that done, I'll be poking chapter 06 a bit...

My apologies tho...although the draft IS available on my Patreon page, hehehe....

you said end April...

Hehehe, the ending is one of those secrets I've not even revealed the most die-hard fans ;) Appreciate the comments!

You better not let Chuck get away or not have Jen and Dan. Get together or I will come find you and loss on your keyboard !

LOL, thank you very much!

I am current working on publishing a new story, but Lapdancing Ch. 06 is about 80% completed (as my Patreon supporters know, because they get an early preview, LOL)...and it's the next story I'm working on. There's even a supporter that wants me to rewrite Lapdancing as a single book (so remove the beginning rehash of each chapter)...that I am thinking about.

Much appreciated...and be sure to check out my blog (URL in profile) on teasers and other discussions about this and other upcoming stories!

This story is amazing. Don't change a thing about how you write it because although the details and multiple views you write can become monotonous at times, it makes for better story telling and better re-reads.

I can't say I've ever been this interested in reading a story for the plot in this category of reading. I love how the FBI are just using her because they can and she's super ****ing hot, especially Nick. It's so ****ed up, I love it. I also really liked the dancing scene/limo scene build-up with the male porn stars and what followed. That's usually not my thing but for whatever reason I loved it. Poor Dan LOL

If I was rich I'd give you a blank check to bunker down in a room and finish this entire story.. I love your other stories but this one is by far my favorite!

That definitely NOT the ending I have planned...and there is a bit of a twist. The ending is one where I have a feeling a lot of people are going to be confused, upset, and probably some not at all happy with, LOL...but there most certainly IS an ending. Ch 06 (which my Patreon users will get a glimpse of this month) is the halfway point...but there's a lot more shit Jen has to go through before then ;)

Dan and Jen by the end of the story are no more. Jen can't quit. Dan and his jealosy can't handle it. He quits working for Dwight and goes back to his real estate work. When a woman has to ask if the relationship is over then it is. If this isn't your ending then please prove me wrong. Oh and add some sort of twist just for fun.

Thank you for your comments!

I've had an ending in mind for some time...just need to get all the parts and pieces in place. I have a couple more chapters to go...just need to find time to write!

for taking the time to write this story, it's enjoyable and fun and I am hoping for a happy ending , they deserve it.. ( yeah, I am a romantic...)

Thanks !

Already have the next chapter 70% done, so yes, there will be more...but I can't make up the shit that's happened over the past few months, hehehe...one thing after another.

Also, the top tier Patreon followers have had me focusing on other stories, so that's been the incentive lately, although several are now wanting the next chapter of Lapdancing, so hoping o get back to it "soon"...but thanks for the comments!

first - the story was astounding! ... so thanks...

second - I really wish you would continue it

third - I've read your blogs about about how you'd continue if there was incentive ...you are sooo busy, your computer broke, it rained, ... blah, blah, blah (now you even have a paying following!)

I'm sad you don't have the inspiration to continue since it was so exhilarating to read.

Nobody's "required" to read my stories...and if this chapter is too long for you, you probably don't want to read any others at this point, particularly some of my more recent stories...

Too F in Long

LMAO!

Short of some disability, I plan on finishing ALL my stories. The main factor is not incentive or want of writing, but simply time. This is purely a hobby, and with real life issues, I only have a few hours each weekend to write.

Currently working on an actual paid commission which I'll be posting hopefully by the end of summer (GASP, I hate ETA's, LOL)...and then will be focusing on the next chapter of Jen and Dan, followed by Annie.

Everybody can keep up to date on what I'm working on (or how little at times) on my blog (URL in my profile)....

The Author writes AMAZING storys

most of them revolving around fucking with peoples minds , control & abuse

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the feedback & comments only add fuel to the fire..

just as the reader waits for the next instalment of Jen & Dan's situation like sharks following a chum line .... The Author will be enjoying making us wait & wait & wait..

possibly eventually deciding to leave the story hanging ... exquisite justice for all us nasty , kinky fucks who have enjoyed the mental torture & anguish of the protagonists.

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ashamed to say .. Voted 5 stars

Oh, I do feel humbled there are so many people wanting additional chapters of all my stories! Don't get me wrong. But as I said, time is simply limited.

I tried releasing a story a bit at a time...that was the experiment with Annie Ch. 03. It was released in three parts as I finished each, but the backlash for releasing it in "segments" compared to the whole chapter has been the reason for holding off until I feel a chapter is completely "finished." For all the people upset at the long delay, there were twice or even three times as many who hated the small releases.

Another issue I had was writing out and releasing a chapter "early" I found I had made a mistake in one plot and had to go back and change it after it had already been posted. Surprisingly, a LOT of people noticed the change...so again, I try to wait until I feel comfortable finishing it myself...not falling into the pressure of forcing a release :/

You could possibly appease the nay-Sayers if maybe you released partials?

I mean this chapter was 40 pages - most peoples entire series combined doesn't equal that many pages. So just an idea to keep the troops happy is to release smaller chapters? I mean in chapter 5 there was easily 10 scenes - so you could have done 10 micro chapters to be exact.

Anyway - I would take these peoples comments as positive in that they are irate enough to bitch about it cause they want and need to see more - makes me think of people always waiting for the new starwars or startrek movie.

LOL, well, considering this is merely a HOBBY, whereby I'm not getting PAID and can only do on my free time... Seriously thought, I truly only have weekends to work on this, and when I have family visiting, other errands to do, or whatever, that interferes with that time. I work from 6am to typically 5pm, so rarely have the desire to work on anything M-F. That's just life... So out of the 48 hours I have for the weekend, I'm sorry my writing spank stories isn't a high priority.

The current story I am working on IS a PAID story, so until that's completed (and hey, I'm being paid for it, so that is my focus), don't expect to see anything else until then.

I think you have some sort of pathological avoidance of finishing anything. From your blog, you seem to always be working on something. But nothing ever gets finished. Its been two years since you published anything. Yet you claim to regularly be working. If its not one thing its another. Stop stringing people along with your excuses. At the end of last year you said something to the effect of "wow, I didn't publish anything all year. I will get that straitened out." Well, here we are 6 months later and still nothing. Pretty soon you will be saying "wow, two years in a row that I didn't publish anything."

LOL, no, not giving up, but as I mentioned on my website there's been a shift in priorities, as one of my stories I am being PAID to write so focusing on that one...it will be storyboarded by a 3D artist in the future. Of course, if somebody wants to slip me another check, I can shift those priorities as well ;)

I'll be getting back to Lapdancing 06 once I get my Lifeguard story done. I'm shooting for the Lifeguard story to be done in May, so summer will bring about Lapdancing, then Annie, and possibly a few others!

I'll look into another teaser...although I haven't touched Lapdancing 06 since starting on the Lifeguard story.

For others, be sure to visit my blog for updates and such (URL in profile!)...

hey - should we give up on the foam party fantasy - at least please submit a longer tease with this episode on your website...

thanks

Much appreciated, and thank you!

I hope to get Chapter 06 out "soon". Be sure to check my blog (URL in my profile) on updates, teasers, and other stories I'm working on!

Finally finished reading this story. It was so long I think my English improved a little bit :)

Please finish the next episode soon. This was the best story I've read in Literotica

LOL, thank you for the kind words, and yes, I will be continuing not only Lapdancing, but ALL my story lines I currently have going.

Problem is simply time. Writing is a hobby for me, and due to work and such, I only get the weekends to write, and then it's a case of whether I'm in the mood or have the time. As I've mentioned before, you can keep track of where my fickled Muse is taking my from my blog (URL in profile)...but rest assured, I do plan on getting SOMETHING out soon...

You have to continue the story. When I got to the last word it was like someone had stopped sucking me just as I was ready to cum!!!! I was not ready for that ending!!!! Damn I believe these stories were with out a doubt the best stories I read on this site! Hands down you have held my attention through the list of stories you have shared with me. I hope you write more!!!!

OK, get your meaning. There is a scene in Chapter 06 which should satisfy your desire, LOL... ;)

Ciao docCis,

I remember of course the episodes but in those situations Dan was more a voyeur

than a cuckold. Maybe, during the party, the scene with Nick ( it's fantastic the idea of the "boyfriend" ) can be called cuckold, where Diamond sees her love and his rival through the windows. Before, Jen wasn't included in the game (except the "test" with Pat Geiger) and only Dan (Charles ?... ) was the player but without Jen.

Actually there have been a few others...if you remember, Dan watched Diamond have sex with Mr. DeWight when she was coerced into signing the contract. In addition, I think it was Chapter 05 he watched her again with Mr. DeWight in the shower.

Chapter 06 has another scene where she will be right in front of him and have to choose between him or Mr. DeWight...although I won't spoil it beyond that, LOL

Thanks again!

Thanks for the answer Doc,

but don't worry, I always checking the news on your blog... In relation to the sentiments of the 2 heroes, I loved very much the separation that you made because,

in my opinion, it underlines mainly their love, simply perfect ! Just one question;

the description of the thinking's Dan leaves understand possible cuckold developments (in the classic meaning of the word ). Until now effectively it's been just an element in the mind of Dan and he's been just a theoretical cuckold ( except the episode of the agent Pat in their home ). Can you tell me anything about ? thank you

for your job Doc !

Thank you for the compliments and time reading!

Be sure to check out my blog (URL in my profile) for updates on when Chapter 06 will be done and what I'm working on. I try to keep it up to date weekly, and it is better than having to visit Literotica and refreshing my profile each week wondering what's going on, LOL.

Appreciate to comments (and your English is FINE!)

Thanks for reading...and no, I'm not forgetting the "Jen" side of things...but I will say things are going to get worse before they get better. I do have her sinking into quite a bit of depravity in Chapter 06, but Chapter 07 I already have some "alone" time with Dan... ;)

Ciao DocCis,

excuse me for my english but i want to give you my congratulations for your story, absolutly the best that I read. Also the description of the same situation

from differents points of view is a good ideas. One thing that I'd like, is a greater attention for the romantic thinkings of Jen for Dan with the fantastic description

that you done of the her sexuality. I loved also the guilts of the two heroes that always

show their love. Now I'm waiting the chapter 6, hoping it will be soon. Thank you

very much for your incredible work

Please don't forget the "Jen" part of the story.I'm sure many others as well as myself are pulling for "Jen" to make a comeback and Diamond to go back to where she was in Chapter 01 or less.

She doesn't need to be a total slut. Happy endings can be a good thing.

Well, there is an end...but I have at least six more chapters planned for this series. I am almost at the end of Chapter 06 (time is so limited, it is taking me forever). In Chapter 06 Dan finally does get some...but I won't spoil it any more ;)

Very interesting reading although it has to end soon and if it doesn't at least let Dan get some! Let him drown his sorrows in some pussy!!!

You should definitely check my blog where I've updated the upcoming Rave/Foam party info...as well as some inspirational pictures, LOL!

thanks - the foam party idea is great...

make here very drunk and wasted - slowly touching first random and then tons of guys can take their turn she doesnt even know who... just by the size of their cocks...

maybe u can let her go in a bodypainting rather than actual cloth... it will be slowly washed off - so she is max exposed in public ;)

Genius!

I was actually planning her attending a Rave party in Chapter 06...and this will make it even better...I can see it now, everybody dressed in their rave clothes, foam everywhere, and suddenly she doesn't know who's touching who...

Great idea!

Also be sure to check out my blog (URL in profile) for story updates and such!

add a raver foam party to it...

Thanks!

Hopefully Chapter 06 will be coming out soon...you can keep track of my progress and other stories and such on my blog (URL in my profile)...

This may well be the best storyline on literotica. Your writing is equal to that of popular novelists and the plot is deep and coherent. Kudos.

Appreciate the comment. Be sure to check out my blog (URL in profile) where I have teasers and such for this and other chapters and stories!

I feel this series is excellent and anxiously await the next chapter. Keep up the good work.

My apologies the story did not interest you...unfortunately it is inevitable some people will like it, some won't. Hopefully I will get the next Annie chapter out soon...although based upon feedback on my blog and here, Lapdancing has more of a following, which is where I've been focused lately...

bored, really bored.... annie is better

this story is very good and well organized even if it is very long but u enjoy every chapter of it .you are talented don't stop and we wait next chapter as soon as possible

I currently have 10 chapters planned for the Lapdancing series...so it's only halfway done. I don't want to give away any of the upcoming plot, but there will be a few surprises in store...

I have definitely enjoyed this story so far, but honestly, I hope you end it soon. It's painful to keep watching Jen cheat on Dan, and if this continues further, I don't think their relationship can ever be repaired. I want too see that bastard Chuck behind bars.

first couple of chapters of this story were great, but this was just over-long drawn out tripe, even skipping over was hard work

I understand the problem reading with your iPad. When I read any long story on Literotica (+5 pages) on my tablet it is difficult. The site just was not made for "mobile" reading. It's much better on a PC with a larger monitor.

The stories are written in Word, but I try to keep paragraphs and such short for online reading. When you're reading on a mobile device things are even more lengthened as a full sentence is several additional lines.

Sorry if it was difficult, but that's more of a factor of the Literotica layout than anything :(

The story was not so muck long as it was difficult to hold my place. Reading it on my iPad. Not sure if it's possible to break down to smaller segments. Enjoyed the story hope there is more.

Yogoe

I warned people many times in comments, at the beginning, and on my blog it would be a long chapter. There were some things I just wanted to have in the story that were obviously not sexual, but what I felt would develop the characters and plot a bit more.

As to Interracial elements...so far, that has not been on purpose. I have a generalized plot in my head and go forward, and it's just not happened. That's not to say it won't happen, LOL... There are some definite scenes which will be interracial, so you can expect them, but again, the past chapters and the lack of such scenes has not been a conscious effort.

Long read but well worth it! are you planning on adding any interracial elements to the story?

Thanks everybody (both comments here and private e-mails and the blog site)! And keep the suggestions coming! I try to incorporate reader's comments as much as I can to get everybody involved, hehehe...

And remember to check out the blog for updates!

I agree with the comment re the revealing clothes. Some more non-stripper stuff would be nice. The hottest scene in my opinion was the nightclub scene where jen lets herself go while dancing. Very hot!!

This was a very well written story, Chapter #5 was the stepping stone for many more chapters. Look forward to your next chapter. Soon I hope!!!

Excellent writing but you could cut about 25% as it is repetitive. Having 3 POV with the same info gives the reader a chance to skip, and skip I did.

This is some of the best writing I have seen on this or any other site. Bravo!

Hmmmm, I know I've read Jaydice's stories in the past, but not sure if they had an influence on the idea or not...it was not intentional. I've read a couple similar stories, but there was no conscious effort to "copy" anybody's idea...

Appreciate the feedback!

Seemed like you working in his story Cum Shot Party.

I thought that given the length it was an extraordinary job. It wasn't needlessly long. It was long because you covered a lot of ground. I like that it seems that Chuck seems to know he has Dan's Fiance and is doing worse than stealing her, he's turning her out as a whore, Can't wait until she starts escorting!!!! And what's more, it seems like he's seducing Jen to want this lifestyle and realize it is where she was always meant to be and what she was meant to do.

Thanks again for all the feedback here and in PM's and on my blog, it's much appreciated!

Your writing style is great and makes me wanting more. Can't wait to see what happens to them and how it will end for the bad guy. Keep the stories coming.

Great story - kinda go wth 'repetitive' comments but can understand what you say you were trying to do - didn't really take away from enjoyment.

How about some clothes that are revealing but not stripper stuff - just for variety. When does Geiger plan to introduce buttplug cam!.

Looking forward to the rest

Or maybe because of, the length. I'm eagerly watching for the next installment of this incredible story. In the meantime, thank you for giving me and my... 'little buddy' something to do.

Once again, thanks for all the replies (including PM's).

In regards to the repetitiveness, that was done on purpose. I wanted everybody to begin to feel she was falling into a routine that included not only the sex, but her everyday activities too. This will begin to play out again in the next chapter or two where she begins to fall into the routine of being home during Sunday/Monday/Tuesday, flying out to DSA Wed/Thur, then flying out to whatever club she will be touring with Friday, followed by a photo-shoot on Saturday.

The whole purpose is to relay that she IS falling into a routine, and that routine involves her exploitation and is actually a part of it. The more comfortable she gets, the more she is used. First it starts with the limo driver, then moves on to other things...

A very enjoyable read. The only small criticism I will make is that we didn't need to read every hour of every day, it makes the story too repetitive. Jen gets up thinks a lot about her situation, chooses her clothes, gets in the limo, dresses there, arrives at work, gets groped in the lift. All this could have been described in a flasback chapter later in the day.

Dude you need to exploit your talent! Excellent story line and writing style. Keep it coming!

Appreciate all the kind words both here, on the blog, and in PM's! Definitely made the time worth it.

Amazing again!

Once again you have dazzled us with your plot twist and turns as Jen/Diamond gets to the Headquarters of DSA. BRAVO!

Thanks again everybody for the comments and feedback, it's much appreciated!

Jen is such a good dancer I get hard just reading about her!

Was an awesome chapter really enjoyed the anal scenes. doesn't mater how long it is cause if it was a book it would be pages so whats the difference if its on paper or on here. only complaint i have is that it was a long time before the chapter came out :)