All Comments on 'Last Call, the Sequel Pt. 03'

Though the man probably deserves much of what happens, still not right to treat him like a bitch 1*

Just animals fucking in a zoo . No human emotions at all. Simply diluted down to the very base levels.

Where's the emotions ? Where's the part that separates these people from monkeys screwing in the monkey exhibit ?

I'm sorry , I'm sure the author spent a lot of time working on this , and for that he should be praised , but this is simply a story about emotionally vepid people .

illiterate cuck shit.

Perhaps I have not read this closely enough, but I can't see any explanation of why she wants to stay with Jerry. She certainly does not seem to love him or have even the slightest affection for him. It's a mystery.

# 1 Cuck crap

Wants Shannon, she loves hberself too much and she has nothing in her heart for Jerry. This is a burn Jerry masterpiece, that is falling apart more and more every chapter

Boring as hell, as badly written as an MM story and the stupid corporate whores thing. There was a story a while back making fun of this shit. You should read it and see how to write.

She a CUNT! Hope it all falls apart!!!!

What was in the letter? Did you ever let Jerry express his feeling of grief come out? She made her determination when she did not stay true to her husband until the decree was final and her holding a signed decree does not give her cart balance to be a middle age slut. Please have enough respect for Jerry to let him die A quick death so as not to be emasculated and please. Have the kids to confront her about bad family choices when he gave his life to provide for them

.... narcissistic, hypocritical Cunt!

I think your "sequel" is becoming a big flop. Doesn't look like there is anybody that has anything good to say about your effort here. Makes one wonder why you even tried, but then you already knew that before you even posted this. Maybe seeking humiliation and negativity is your cup of tea. Eh.

As puzzling as the plot is, the cold detached reporting of this story is a real downer. Instead of putting us in the moment, you report to us what we are seeing during a replay of the moment. And so much of it is tedious or irrelevant detail. Where she sat, where he sat, what she wore, how much he cums, how she doesn't spill a drop, where they went for dinner, what time they finished dinner, what time Marie left then what time she returned. Really, you think all that is interesting or exciting?

Instead of reporting what is happening, put us in the action and describe their actions and feelings as it is happening. Relive a great fuck, don't just tell us, It was a great fuck.

Thanks for the effort, but it is moving into areas totally different from her original concerns and motives. Now she wants to be a company whore and professional swinger. Such life styles almost always end badly, but realism hasn't been part of this story since chapter 2.

This just gets worse every read. If you want to show she has turned to the slut of the month... you have succeeded

i did enjoy part 1 but it has quickly degenerated into a one-sided, toilet circling story of human waste... why bother writing any more... look at the rating for the story going down like your character in the last segment... doing things for caine she wouldn't do for jerry... give it up and try something else...

looks like it's time for shannon and jerry to move on...

needs to be tested for std's. Jerry had to be tested but she is sleeping with every dick she meets.

At first hubby was a dick and she gave him an ultimatum and he called her on it and she moved out . Now she is really turned into a pig who will fuck whoever she wants. She should be telling in their sessions about her fucking a young college kid just like hubby told what he did. Now she will play like a dummy . Caine is obviously going to show up at their house as the daughters boyfriend. She will also fuck her direct boss most likely because the mentor was telling him about her. Hope it all comes out . She is also looking to sneak money that hubby don't know about with Caine as her advisors and fuck buddy.she would have a problem meeting him after she moves back in with hubby anyway. Will she still fuch him after he's with her daughter, I hope not. She has now become a corporate whore, you can dress that up however you want and a fuck toy for a kid who is as old as her own kids. Why do woman say all of there relationships define who they are today. Really does it mean every cock that went up her ass or every load that went down her throat makes up who she is as a person. I feel that's just a sick excuse or reasoning to acting like a pig.. Does it define me if I goy 100 different girls to blow me? No. She should just divorce him then it's not as bad if she wants to act like a slut. If she doesn't want hubby to know or her kids or friends than that just means she is ashamed of what she's doing. Hope hubby doesn't go along with her being a corporate whore but he might being he is a cheater all along anyway

That line says it all.

I hope Jerry finds out and nukes this useless cunt until she, and everyone around her, is flat, black, and glows in the fucking dark.

I agree with @overthehillmedic: "This just gets worse every read"! Each part is worst than the previous and. The original author must be thunderstruck how someone could destroy his story and keep destroying it more and more with each new chapter...And the worst part is that the story didn't end here and we don't see its end soon...1*

Too bad they don't allow minus ratings on this site - this story started bad and got worst as it went on. There were no redeeming qualities to this story just a less hate story at best. This was utter crap and if there was ever a story that one could "unread" this would be the one! Last call for you websrfr - you suck!

It would all make sense if Jerry is Maria's lover (there were no weekends with the boys!) and tis whole thing is a very elaborate plot to save Jerry's marriage from his perspective to get his wife into the lifestyle. Everyone is in on it except the wife. As soon as the wife has a lover Jerry calls to reconcile. Steven knows all about her lover and her issues with Jerry...well, of course he does.

Nowlets see if I'm right. :)

is there going to be any consequences for her actions in this?

she is not working on a marriage in this. but you do have her turning into a slut and lying to every one. that in its self should bite her in the ass.

she apparently doesn't love jerry anymore, she is now fucking around with her boss,who is getting off cuckolding jerry, along with fucking others. there can be no good outcome to this.

i do believe this marriage is over.

I agree with some of the others. Story is starting to get a little a bit of track. Jerry had an affair? Seems like a cheap way to save face for her. She's a slut, no matter how you try to cut it. I do look forward to these stories but she has to have consequences for what she's doing. Keep up the good work and lets try to keep the story a little bit more real.

I have a feeling that cane's mystery college girl could be her daughter .

It's always enjoyable to read a well written story that's not follow the usual plot. I would like to see some more tension between the two of the main characters before they reconsile or go their own ways. I would also like to find out more about what Jerry has been doing in the background. - This is an intelligent story; ignore the Trolls and keep going. - Thanks.

a stupid ending for people who are trying to work things out in the end who would care about either one. Just another author who took the sicko route.

by fucking another guy, who's giving her advice on how to save her marriage? I agree with other that consequences are in order for her, though I don't think it'll make a difference to her at this point.

Whether these trolls like how your characters live their lives, or the choices they make...

DO NOT LISTEN to these negative trolls!!!

You are a good writer, and an even better story teller...

Keep up the good work.

5*s for your writing skills alone...

And the story was not half bad either.

Well written, story makes you want to keep reading and the sex is what you would expect, not the over the top b.s. that the other writers feel necessary to go on and on about.

Keep your stiries coming!

I actually liked the part 1 and part 2. But I lost it when she lied to him about her boy toy. It's true that there's a lot of justification on her part, but lying through her teeth when her husband came clean about his affairs is FUCKING DISGUSTING.I am done with this shit.

when a husband does the same thing this slut wife did, everyone calls for blood. she fucks her boy toy and some how its a hot story.

I like the methods you use to create a sense of anticipation as the narrative. You've made "Shannon" become a sympathetic figure , first, by the way you built on the results of her initial "Honey, we need to talk" moment, then the unresponsiveness of "Jerry" and then the revelation of his pre-seperation wanderings. There is also the subtle underlying conspiracy with Marie to get him set up for an open relationship after their reconciliation.

I hope you can continue this series. There certainly is a lot of material and a lot of plot possibilities. For instance: who is her daugher dating?

that is my question, also. can you imagine if the author takes that route. that would requoire about 3 more chapters. if that is the case, wouldn't it be interesting if they were to meet. Caine might want them to me to get Shannon's opinion of her.

this could be really good.

This one went South in a hurry. What a bitch she turned out to be. Not at all surprised she started ducking her son in the next installment.

she turns into a cunt who sleeps with her son. yeah this is crap

Well, in your three unwanted addendum chapters to the original story you have managed to destroy an entire family and turn a decent woman into a wanton slut. Please do us readers and all the authors here a favor and resist your desire to either improve and/or finish any more stories. Please, write your own stories and post them, I’d like to look them over. But, again, please, don’t go bastardizing other authors’ stories.

waist NOT waste

Only skimmed, thank goodness. Saw enough to know this is utter crap.

Why is she leading Jerry on about reconciliation? The statement about keeping her feelings and fucking from the therapist and Jerry say she has no involvement in the effort. She's a cheap slut and nothing more, with no redeeming character.

Please allow minus stars!!!

Crap as others comments. At least only skimmed. No more wasted time

CRAP jtwheels

What a fucked up slut she turns out to be.

I sincerely hope she ends up burnt big time.

1/5

0/5

You ruined Azahura's nuanced story.

In a sequel, the characters have to remain true.

Didn't work

Worthless whore.

🙄

To paraphrase, if the marriage Jerry wanted comes about, it won't be the same. She'll still be seeing Caine. Then she agrees to the promotion & to have sex with her boss. I imagine she agrees & "performs" well with him, & possibly/ probably others. I don't know; at this time, I stopped reading as I got sick from all the stupidity/ idiocy from the story thus far.

She agrees to go to counceling, is open - at least slightly - to reconciliation if Jerry's serious, but at the same time planning on seeing Caine & perhaps others even if it's successful. There's no excuse for Jerry & his actions; she tried to work things out but he was brain dead.

Seeing others before hand, to keep her options opened, is excusable; she doesn't want to be severely burned again. Doing that after marriage, she's a fucked up slut. Hope she's found out & burned. It's really hard to feel sorry for either of these irritants; one's an adulterous husband that ignored his wife, the other, a slut turned whore. Neither really deserves to be happy.

Story has become irritating & sickening. 1 star but I would love to give it 0.