All Comments on 'Laundry Room'

If you had 'personalized' the story by a name or another description instead of using you/your, I would have read more than the first some five lines.

I think your writing style shows promise. This offering is too short to even qualify as an instalment of a short story. To get higher marks I recommend taking place little longer to produce something more substantial - something with enough room for some plot, bit of character-development and maybe a little suspense.

Editing and proofing helps.

It's not Road.

What day is this? what makes Wednesday the new day?

It's not about he house being vacant, but it does lend to foreshadowing.