All Comments on 'Lauren, Eight'

Ain't love grand!

5

Not much of a story and certainly not romantic.

I'm posting this here, too in case you don't go back and check new comments on Lauren - 5.

OK, I promised I'd come back and give you a score after thinking about your mini-episodes for a day or two. I waited until I read L- 5, 6, and 7, all of them too short, random, and seemingly pointless. Only one of your "stories" has broken the 1300 word mark and after L-7 you had averaged 1224.6 words per post. Lauren 8 was the shortest submission since Laurens 1 &3. None of those even broke the kiloword mark. In fact, L-8 DROPPED your words per episode average to 1194.9 words per episode (WPE.) In 8 episodes you have not even totaled 10,000 words! (9559, if you want to be precise.) (So I Tend to think mathematically - so sue me.)

In short, (Though it's probably a little late for short) I'm still pissed at the lack of content in your series both story-development wise and reading length wise. I just get into what is happening in the current (Chapter? Episode? Vignette?) and it's over and "Good By till tomorrow." Please take the time to write a decent length submission, where something actually happens that relates to the previous one and ties into the one that will follow. That will be much more readable, which will mean I won't have to go back and give you 2s or 3s on L- 1 thru 8. Since, following your pattern, L-9 has probably already been submitted, that means I will be looking for L-10 to be at least 5,000 words, or somebody's series is going to get a bunch of 2s - maybe 1s if I'm Really Perturbed! Yeah, I know writing is hard, but dragging a story line out by dribs and drabs is really unfair to your readers. It's like those Movie serials the theaters showed on weekends where a short episode ended in a cliffhanger, designed to make you come back next week, and the week after that, and the week after that, and the week after that... That gets old in a hurry. So - enough with the vignettes - write the story that you have shown you can write without the frustrating tiny bites and we'll be friends again.