by SirMasterPaul
The idea's definitely a good one. Love the Femme Domme-butch sub dynamic here. But some proof reading could definitely have helped tidy things up a little, and made for a better read. The story quite literally stops mid-sentence. Nice try though. Gave it 3 stars for effort.
Was it cut off for the beginning of chapter 2? A very good ide here but because of ending and mistakes 3 stars.