by leeter
great story but you really need to get your work properly edited. otherwise very well thought out story line
Yeah... I re-read this after the fact and it was painful. I have an edit in the pipeline to massively fix things but I'm queuing it behind another edit. Not sure how "sat" became "sad" *wince*
Wow, quite a wild ride! I've only read this part but see more Leet stories.... Me thinks I likey.... :D Will be reading more!