by Recidiva
An interesting read. I’m sure I have an opinion on this, but I couldn’t tell you what it is. Agreeing with another reader, I’d say this should be published. Might need a little polish…. not much, though.
Seems like a horror and reluctance type deal, with a weak setup for the main two characters, and a paragraph of fatalistic bonding before a brief coupling. I dunno, I guess the trapped thing can be erotic, since there are situations I've seen it well done, but I didn't find this to be one of them. It probably wouldn't matter to point out individual things, so I won't. It might have been better had they tried to escape in the beginning, since nothing brings people together like a crisis as well as being used as building material and being turned into soap. They could have had closeness at the molecular level for eternity (or at least until being broken down by oxygen) as soap, something many people merely dream of. It was still entertaining but disappointing.
I loved it! I wish there were more to this strange and facinating story.. more of sean and rowan.. more to what ends up happening to randy. Incredible! *hugs* Thanks!
Nicely done darlin'. Just the right blend of the supernatural and the everyday business of life. The ending really wrapped it up well.
This story is perfect for Halloween. It's romantic, tender, funny and scary, leaving the readers wanting more. I did not want it to end.
I am really impressed with this story. It's a better read than the Turn of the Screw. The dialog was intelligent and snappy.
Thoughtful plotting with deftly handled humorous touches. Good work. Best of luck in the contest.
beautifully written, and very nicely wrapped up at the end. A real page-clicker. Thanks for a great story!
Delightful, entertaining, great fun. Also got a chill or two when the ghosts started to appear...
What a rave-worthy story!! A spookier tale of tragic romance was never told around any campfire. Now please, take that flashlight out from under your chin and go get published. That's for the sake of the rest of the world. For my sake, please write a sequel!
I always enjoy a good ghost story and this is definitely one of them. Excellent descriptive imagery. Superior dialogue. Good luck in the contest.
Lovely prose, a well-wrought plot, and an entertaining balance of creepy and funny.
i found it quite amusing. i kind of want vengeful guardian ghosts myself.
or maybe i just want to be one.
Loved it when I first saw it. Loved it even more after reading it again.