All Comments on 'Lesbian Seduction - Intern Pt. 02'

I can respect that the grammar is as you intended it. All the misspellings intentional too?

Wow well done. Fantastic hot story. Different enough from the original. The ending was actually pretty sad. Not what I expect for a story on here but impressive

I enjoyed the story. I appreciate that is was more a love story. A suggestion for the FOV verses TPP. Maybe separate the paragraphs and include punctuation marks.

Hopefully you write more about them

This has become one of my favorite stories! Looking forward to hopefully more wonderful love stories like this.

I like the story, that is the plot line from beginning to end. Get someone, anyone, to edit your work. Correcting grammar and typing errors and making readable text that distracts or confuses the reader is how a story is polished. Part 2 stole the show, overall a well done piece. Opening with Riley's funeral was a surprise and effective. Kaylee overcomes her guilt, the July 5 breakfast is all love, the lover's passionate and erotic weekend marriage, 30 happy years together described. The end. No, Kaylee gets an intern. Never saw that coming. Part 2 moved fast and packed in a lot. Strong B to B+. Polished would've been an A. I do think the sex was overwritten and too much because the story was so damn good!

A wonderful story. Thank you for sharing it.

Amazing, thank you for sharing. Loved how you took it full circle.

You make claims that you like the grammar as it is.

Then you write a sentence: “ I had arrived thirty minutes before Riley normally did and brought a piece offering with her. “ in which you switch from first person to third person ?

Honestly at points it made it hard to read and killed the mood.

This story literally brought tears to my eyes! I loved it. . . . but you could use a proof-reader/editor. I'm available if you desire.

Best regards,

Amazing story!!!

Beautiful!

Absolutely a beautiful story. One that I personally wish would never end.

Yes , sometimes it happens,if the the love is true and approved by GOD.

GREAT !!!!!! Story I love how it was told. So sweet and romantic. If I were a woman I'd love to be treated like Kyliee was. Thank you CB_Grl_Dani

Simply Brilliant !

Rapier

Beautiful story… loved every bit of it…thank you…

Great story. Literally got tears to my eyes!

Wow! And how great for Kaylees dad to remember this was “her “ decision her life. If she were my daughter, I would be so proud! Great story, great writing! We must have M O R E

Great story! Thank you for sharing it

I wish I had 10 stars

Paul Bearers should be PALLBEARERS

Wringer is actually a RINGER as in a telephone Ringer

Charter 2 or this story - It's supposed to be CARLSON not Carson.

her answer was. Wile (WHILE) I still felt wicked I couldn't wait to hear their reaction when they

FYI - This is the best Lesbian love story that I have read

This is still a GREAT story!