All Comments on 'Letter Perfect Affair'

Cool story about love lost love found.

Is believing vocabulary and grammar are the main components for writing. That's only true on the SAT. Possessing an "ear for the way" people really speak is far more valuable.

on publishing your first story.

I look forward to reading your future submissions.

Very good effort, but, for me, there was a lack of emotional depth.

To have a new love immediately after marriage failure reduces the emotional impact too much.

It seems he divorced his wife and married Minh. I would like to have heard the discussion between him and his first wife. He could have said he understood because he had, in his mind, already left her. It didn't need to be an angry confrontation as there was a reason for her cheating that he accepted but not to hear anything from her was disappointing. However, we'll written 4 stars

Loving wives wouldn’t be my first choice for this. Be paragraph at the end doesn’t make a loving wife. lol. Maybe romance or erotic coupling would be more accurate. Also, letting the first wife “disappear” made the story a let down.

I would have liked more details on their former marriage breakup and consequences.

I have trouble with these stories where the guy gets clued in about his wife’s affair but does nothing for months. I think most guys would take quick action.

Next story you write please find someone to at least read over it to make sure it makes sense. Not only were there glaring plot holes (where did the first wife go) but some of your sentence structure could use work. I would encourage you to look at some of the resources that are available here.

Keep going...

Difficult to follow, although not awful for a first submission. Keep working on it.

...with 26thNC. I had to re-read this a couple times to get the gist of what happened. I do think it is a good first story. Just needed to be a bit more flowing to keep the attention. His fantasy was too long in my opinion. I wanted to just skip over it to get back to the actual story.

When did he get divorced, and what happened ?? A little disjointed, and the fantasy was a little drawn out. Not enough separation in the cerebral imaginative aspect, and the melting ice cream. I mean, sex is sex, but ice cream is serious stuff. But all that aside, the Bear approves. Keep up the good work.

The BEAR

If you need help falling asleep

This HAD potential at first.

Spoiled by mediocrity and misplaced sentiment. This COULD have been a great story but it never really got off the ground. I am disappointed it deserves a better continuation and conclusion. 3*** for the half you submitted!

Pathetic story written by another cuck

Loved it. The story of their love, not a story of the betrayals, infidelity and mundane tawdry details of divorce.

Hard to follow at times!

4

3 stars for an unfinished story

FLAT FACE ORIENTAL YELLOW TAIL IS NOT MY CUPPA TEA.

It was too hard to read it in its entirety.

When did he divorce?

⭐⭐ Yeah, this is crap.

Too much descriptive text, not enough drama.