All Comments on 'A Wife Named Kate Ch. 01'

YOU should be detailing the story much better. This felt very rushed. Kate's comment about a 'devil cunt' to a stranger sort of hints at a foul-mouthed slut and gives the impression Bentley might not be the first to enjoy Kate on the side.

So this is your first time writing and yet you sat in the background and just read the stories yet you learned nothing it’s garbage and should be in the voyeur section didn’t you learn anything when you write in a certain section you have to keep to that section classification Eg since you have put it in the loving wife section you can’t add extra in aka voyeur in it as soon as you add things like that it becomes the voyeur section if you add interracial in to your story it becomes a interracial section story am I making it any clearer now it’s still garbage buts its a no from me

Remembers of her husband washis Dusty Trail as he tore out of Eagle Creek and never returned... screaming... I am no Cuck, ovef and over.... BTW Bentley's wife did not just leave for a new job, she divorced him for his infidelity and breaking up young couples marriages. But Dusty was the lucky one.. he got out before he inherited the 50,000 acre ranch the became the largest land project in Eagle Creek... which he and his second wife ran from Portland.

Rough, very, very rough.

First of all the Anon 'Really' has no idea what he/she is talking about. LW is a broad category and the introduction of voyeur or interracial elements can easily be accommodated as long as the basic category material is respected. You did at least that much.

The writing is childish and reminds me of a twenty year old who's been watching too much porn. Real life isn't like porn movies, but this story is.

Demon cunt? Really?

Go hit the toplists for Loving Wives and read the first 25-50-100 stories. You should be able to see the difference in your story vs those top stories.

You say you've been reading here for twenty years. If this story is an example of all you've learned about writing after twenty years, then writing is not your strong point.

Found this an enjoyable read and a bit brief. Already wishing for more should tell you this is a winner. Keep pages coming.

If you are going to criticise someone then make sure you are not doing it from a Glass House!

People who live in glass houses shouldn't throw stones!

In other words, don't criticise others when you yourself are clearly unable to write, and punctuate!

Just what we need, another cuck writer.

I know I can’t write properly for love or money but if you haven’t noticed that nearly most of the stories that have been put in the loving wife section don’t even belong in that section you don’t have to be a rocket scientist to know that when you write a story for the loving wife section you don’t add anything to do with the other sections like you don’t write about a gay gentleman then shove it in the loving wife section or write in your story about mind control then shove it in the loving wife section or write in your story about voyeur then again shove it in the loving wife section the loving wife is mainly to do with a loving wife and it’s a very tough section to write in that is why the only thing the readers are loving at the moment in the loving wife section are stories of husbands getting there revenge on the cheating wife there stories are getting rave reviews they the reviews rise 10 fold when someone writes that sort of story telling you that they are either very proud people that read that section and there are also people that have been hurt by cheating but as I mainly say if they had done there homework and put it in the right section I wouldn’t be doing this I would be just staying in the background enjoying reading the loving wife section but it had to be done otherwise they’d just dump any old thing in the loving wife section

Those awful words from an author who is not yet ready to write. " To be continued. "

Another cuck fucked up want-to-be author.

“Watch the big corn hole tournament on tv”?

This has to be code for sex, right?

I mean, where is gathering to watch OTHER people play a tailgating game on television a ‘thing’?

Even with all the other issues here that was what stuck with me

Dont listen to the wanna be literary critics on here they want every story in this catagory to end up with the wife sitting at the bus station with nothing but the clothes on her back and a one way ticket to El Paso Texas. Pay them no mind if they dont like this type of story they should not be in here

maybe the author wrote what appeals to him, not you. maybe a lot of the things you guys hate are hidden meanings or inside jokes. I dont get why people read the loving wives, then complain about it? go back to the incest stories ya wankers.

Im not affraid to sign my name either

John (like the toilet)

divorce this dirtball

Mercifully, Mikey spared us part 2. It's been nearly 4 1/2 years since he dumped this refuse, so I think we're safe from the next installment.