All Comments on 'Life's Balance'

Yes the Story is Well Presented.

Truly. No typos, no bad word choice, no inconsistencies. I have no idea about the drugs angle, so no . . I am not going to give any hints there. For your first entry, Rate it "A" for Excellent.

Let us fervently hope Jonathan dies from his (unexplained, was he a baddie, or a drive-by victim) wounds and that way, he can't 'wop yer ass' when he comes out.

I can't see this tale leading to a Part II that is anywhere near as good as this, so ignore all the "Gimme More" people.

Yours,

Kilroy.

GREAT STORY. WAS WONDERING IF SHE WAS GOING TO SUCK SAM WHILE SHE WAS BEING DP'D, BUT THAT WOULD HAVE BEEN TYPICAL. GREAT WORK.