All Comments on 'Like Maple Syrup'

Rather good for a newbie on this site. Rather short. Personally I would have loved more build up. Good believable story. Can I hope for another chapter soon? Maybe flesh out the 2 characters a bit?

2 stars

DragonRider55

I see this is a first-effort (or at least a first-submission), and I certainly look forward to reading your next submission on or about the 15th of this month. I hope your next story will be a bit longer as I do enjoy reading your writing. Rock on!

A great first story. Characters well described, good dialogue, interesting although a common plot. The opening scene was well set, his interior dialogue was right on, the seduction was rushed, A very good sex scene. keep writing.

For a debut this was good. The build up to the sex scene was spot on. I hope you take it further

WOW! Gave you 5 because they don't have 6! Your other writing skills are on display. Do please consider making this a series. It cries out for more, as do I.

Paul

Very lovely story which I hope you consider continuing it as you now have my undivided attention as to how things will turn out for the two lovers!

Thanks for sharing!

Nice first story. Looking forward to reading more from you.