All Comments on 'Linda's Mistake'

[Author's note: Yes, this is a cliffhanger type ending, apologies if that is not what you were looking for. I may pick it up if it seems like there is interest and I can think of a good idea

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great way to piss everyone off

Ffs.

Frankly, I would prefer you not continue this story. You have made a clear point about a manipulative boy and a stupid woman. What more is there to say?

How old are u?U write like a horny hormonal teenager ! Suggest you concentrate on your studies and forget this site! Are ur parents even aware u tried writing here??

What fools we mortals are.

Its okay with the other comments. You do you.

Frankly i wish Jay gets both Linda and Melissa pregnant and takes their anal virginity.

Gawd what tripe. This is what happens when the baby is thrown away and the after birth is raised.

Well women are selfish and vile

"Yes, this is a cliffhanger type ending"...Really? An expected ending from two cheating whores! No interest in a follow on...1*

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Don't post stories that you aren't going to finish.

Dont continue this nonsense. A "happily married" wife fucks around on their husband. If these "wives" are so "happily married" why fuck around?

There's no interest, so you won't need to pick this up. Not ever.

Should be renamed "Cantcountsheep's Mistake"

"This is my first story, please be gentle." Fuck you, learn to write and people will reward, posting this drivel will get you nothing but disdain. 1*

Forget the bad comments- you write well, you keep it interesting, you keep it moving. The setting is different, the plot doesn't follow the usual formula, the 'cliff hanger' ending- no, too abrupt. There HAS to be a second chapter, but I'm not sure I want to read it. I don't like women being demeaned and put down. 40 year old women in stable relationships, with good sex lives, being totally played by an 18y kid? Not buying it, but really like the way you write.

This is just wrong. The inmate is running the asylum. Linda and Melissa let a wet behind the ears, 18 year old boy manipulate them into getting what he wanted...between their legs that is. But hey, it is a commune! And commune evokes the vision of hippies...which brings to mind the summer of love...which meant anything and everything was on the table, er, bed, well table works too...you know what I mean! But two 40 year old women have let a 18 year old boy 'dick-tate' the their interactive events. Jay is in charge. Explain that to your husband Linda, we'll see how far the communal ethics of caring and sharing are tolerated. Utopian ideas of tolerance, love and sharing are all well and good until somebody lays claim to your piece of heaven. -- 1☆ because there are already categories for reluctance and mature

I liked the story, it was really smooth and easy to read.

According to this story, all 40 year old women are sluts in waiting. What a low opinion of married women. No need to continue this one. Just let it die a slow agonizing death.

First story in LW? Big mistake. LOL.

What I saw shocked me, but probably should not have. All the clues were there. I saw my husband, and my friend, Melissa. Both completely naked, having vigorous, aggressive sex on the rock. He was grabbing her perky breasts and slamming into her as she moaned with pleasure.

“I was filled with horror, disgust, and....well, probably more than a little jealousy and lust. I sat there, frozen, covering my mouth to keep from yelping, unsure of what to do.“

Eventually my lust grew too much and I walked up to them. They were pleasantly surprised when I started helping them instead of throwing a fit. I realized I couldn’t cheat on my husband anymore and was a natural born Cuckquean. Me and Melissa both told Jay to fuck off and we brought many more girls for my husband to fuck. All while Jay sat in the bushes jerking his little dick.

his predatorial ways need stopped while he his young

Please keep going! I see many hedonistic plot twist! We need some light entertainment this summer!

Well-written start. Welcome to the fray that's called LW.

Hooked

Jay could well be in for a real true drubbing. Two husbands, maybe more. He should run now. D

We need an ending. Why was her daughter in such a mood? Did he impregnate her? Did she confront Melissa? Too many loose ends.

The story is well constructed but what lets it down for the reader is the very frequent use of “me and Melissa”, “me and my husband”, etc. This is very poor use of the English language, as you should always put yourself last as in “Melissa and I”, “my husband and I” as this makes it a much better read.

shit happens, especially when dealing with 18 year old cock

yeah let the husband catch them and divorce her whore ass

This is the most brutal and rudely opiniated group of common taters on this site . Not a good idea to post in the LW sub genre if your feelings get hurt easily . It doesn’t take much to elicit a derogatory comment from these commentators, probably because there’s a high number of divorcees whom were victims of a cheating spouse , so they’re very opiniated . That’s my guess anyway . Don’t be discouraged by negative comments and write the rest of your story . Your story was very good and deserves a finish ! 5stars here

To the commenter below talking about the hateful people in this group, be aware, its 90% one sad little man.

my wife and I live next to BLM land in Idaho. There is a stream that has a hot spring in it about a mile back. We used to go skinny dipping all the time and never thought twice about it. One day two hunters walked up and saw us. I guess I got a bit pissed and yelled at them to go away and things escalated. Before I knew it they turned their guns towards me and one tied me to a tree while they both raped my wife. When it was over she untied me and we went home. After a lot of talk we both realized we had mixed feeling. On one hand we felt violated, but on the other we both were very turned on by it.

She gets her cumupance when she finds her husband fucking one of the young girls who caught him skinny dipping and come on to him. What is good for the goose is good for the gander,but l bet she does not agree.

Cliffhanger ending actually means "I couldn't think of an ending".

Horrific. And not what I'd say was super well written.

Story about a bunch of people so bored and repressed they are essentially fucking children. That's what an 18 year old is to a woman in her 40s.

Gross.

And the whore described in this story betrays her husband with an 18 year old that her daughter is dating at a time when her and her husband are trying to get pregnant?

She has unprotected sex with him twice even tho she knows he could get her pregnant?! Just another story about a stupid slut.

Do us a favor and don't write again.

If you do I hope it's a sequel about how this stupid bitch gets caught along with the 4 other stupid cunts who are fucking this 18 year old child...all 5 of the married sluts end up pregnant by him. Their husband's divorce them. The little commune they live in is destroyed by the break up of the 5 families. The slutty MC of this story loses not only her husband, but also her daughter who spits in her face and tells her to stop fucking her boyfriends. Her daughter leaves with her ex-husband leaving her to raise the bastard child on her own. The 18 year old is kicked out of the commune and his life is destroyed as he gets paternatity tested 5 times proving he is the father of 3 girls and 2 boys born within 75 days of one another. And all 5 women saddle him with child support judgements. This poor stupid dumbass thinks his life is really bad as he works 10 hour shifts at the local factory...where 2/3rds of his wage goes to support 5 kids he doesn't even know. He's gonna have to live with his parents for at least the next 18 years because he can't afford to live anywhere else.

He does have it bad...but it gets a lot worse one Saturday about a year later. He is coming out of the late movie...it's his only diversion...the only thing he can afford is twice a month going to a movie. Walking to his parents car in the back of a dark parking lot...when 5 very large and very angry men wearing ski masks appear suddenly out of the dark....

Stories like this are not "hot" and "sexy"...or even good. They are about consequences. And there are big consequences for everyone in this story that you didn't write about.

As for some of the rest of the people commenting here about this genre and those of us who are negative here. Let me say this to you- go fuck yourselves with your pronouncements and diagnosis about how all of us are sad, cheated on people who can't get over our histories. I got news for you. We've all been cheated on. All of us. Even you. Next time you look into the eyes of your spouse or partner? Know they've fucked someone else since you said "I do" or since you committed to be exclusive. It's just a fact of life. In today's world everyone has cheated. Doesn't make it right or make it something to emulate here.

This genre is what it is. Don't like it? Don't care. Don't post here. Don't read here. I. don't. Care.

I hate cheaters. I hate stories about liars and cheaters who willingly and stupidly betray their spouses and destroy their families like the stupid cow in this story...for mostly no other reason than "I was bored". Or "I wanted to". Or "because I thought you'd never find out." Or "I don't know why?".

And I hate the authors who try and glorify this betrayal and hold it up as some kind of super hot thing...and I absolutely detest cuckolds and hotwifes and that horrific lifestyle. And last I checked it's not against the law for me to hate detestable people and the stories they write. So...when I read and don't like? I'm gonna post comments that are not very nice if comments are turned on. And I'm gonna rip some people a new one. And I'm goingnto vote 1 or 2 stars. And again. I. Don't. Care.

And to the guy who posted about his wife being raped while he was tied to a tree at gunpoint by hunters. And afterwards they were "turned on" by it? Ummm...you and your wife need to seek serious professional help. Your brains or guts would have been leaking out on the ground with a 4 lb pressure trigger pull and there is nothing sexy or hot about a rape under such violent circumstances. You both need help. Andni hope to God you reported it to the police and they prosecuted the hunters. Hunters are not hard to find. They leave a trail. From reporting on their tags where they harvested their deer. To where they parked. To the physical evidence they leave behind. To where they camped. Where they filled up on gas. You can find deer or elk hunters pretty easily. I hope the police were involved and the hunters are in jail. If you didn't report it? And your wife liked it? I'd be concerned if I were you. Chances are she set you up. And is probably fucking the two hunters behind your back and laughing at you dummy.

I was 20, a college student, and wanted to enjoy the Hot Springs at Big Bend National Park, Texas. The springs are usually a pretty private place because of their remoteness, but the evening I arrived I found two women, likely in their 30s/40s, naked and relaxing in the springs. They invited me to join them, and we progressed to fucking for two days and nights in their cabin at the Chisos Mountains Lodge, which was a much nicer place than my campsite. I didn't do the hiking I had planned, but enjoyed both of them more than any nature walk. I won the lottery that week! Great story.

Wow. Is there no moderation on this site to delete comments that are personal attacks and have nothing to do with a literary critique?

Mostly well written. A few continuity issues.... Interesting scenario. Sorta sad that the boy was not totally innocent.

That might be the topic of your next story. An adult treating a youngin to a lifetime's memory.

Hey! I’m so sorry you seem to have so many bored humans in the review of this story. I loved it and hope you decide to come back to the series at some point.