All Comments on 'Lisa'

You are on a roll at the moment darling, another very hot and steamy tale xxxxx

Very nice, the spelling could do with a bit of a touch up, as i am sure your body could. But well done, very sexy. Had me cummin loads.

So many grammar errors and use of wrong words, and that's just the first two paragraphs....

Maybe you have seen the long standing popular, children’s sparking wheel spinning toy — the fun starts when you push the plunger and the color display on the wheel comes to life with sparks flying and swirling colors. Reminds of your erotically spinning, highly colorful tales. Fun to watch.

Let's start with I'm offering my erotic tales for free, sharing intimate thoughts and feelings, If my spelling errors upset you don't read me again, simple, acting superior correcting small errors says more about you then me. I hope you enjoy reading my stories, as much as I enjoyed writing them. They are not a book report constructed so every word is perfect, I have a tumbling out style writing from emotion. I love feedback even the harsh comments from the grammar police "English must be your second Language" being the most cruel/funny. What would be helpful to acknowledge is not only are some of these rules the grammar police hold so dear incredibly capricious, they’re also constantly changing. The thing that is oft overlooked is that as language changes, as it naturally does over time, the rules that govern it should change as well.

Yours Truly Cheryle

This could be enhanced with better punctuation. Please have your stories edited before publication. Otherwise it was very enjoyable.

Bad editing

I still can't work out what this sentence means: "I left out fantasizing about her naked body as I masturbated in the tube earlier out."

Could you explain please?

Loved it honey.