All Comments on 'Lisa's Fall Ch. 01'

Poorly written. Why would the mother ever submit to this selfish jerk?

I am a big fan of BDSM, but this takes it a little to far. Not to mention the typos.

... but in all fairness, we were warned, at the very beginning, that it would probably be so.

Typos affect everyone's work - especially a beginner's, so we should allow the author a bit of slack, especially considering this is a first story. It needs polish and a more rigorous approach, I agree, but it wasn't at all bad. Four stars, HansIdNi, and thank you for writing for us. Please carry on writing - I look forward to reading more of this story.

If the story is hot enough typos don't bother me and this story was certainly hot enough. Looking forward to the next installment.

beautiful. my qoodness i cant wait untill the next one. hurry wiht it!

With the first word in the story being misspelled my first thought was that this was going to be a dud. I'm glad my first thought was proved wrong.