All Comments on 'Little Mermaid'

Suggest removing subject you from the story and name the characters. As a reader, the writer is instructing reader action rather than inviting them to share a story. Sci fi makes it even more challenging to read subject you writing as there is a consistent conflict since I, as a reader, wouldn’t behave as a sci fi character. You should rework the story to explore the variations and keep writing.

ignore the previous comment, that person knows nothing about being creative! Your story is good, yes some gramatical errors, but nothing wrong with the story you wrote and there is no "set rules" how stories should be wirrten or approached.

I agree with second person. I loved how this was written in second person, or made it so much more immersive.

Excellent prose!

11/10!!!!!