All Comments on 'Little Sisters Ch. 05: Snowed In'

you ever have English lessons when you were at school?

You did go to school, didn't you?

Your writing style and your grammar are bad and the actual dialogue is ridiculous, totally lacking credibility.

Ok yeah my grammar sucks I never was good in English and trying to find someone to help edit has been a royal pain so I do my best. At least I actually have the guts to stand by what I wrote ibstead of being a coward and hiding behind an anonymous tag i mean come on yor identity is still hidden when you use your username. If you dont have the guts to put yourself in the crosshairs just keep quiet.

Your story slapped bro

I plan on continuing I am not doing this for any other reason but I want to. So if some don't lile it they don't have to read it but if they do thats good. As long as there is someone who likes them I plan to keep writing them.

I say if you are enjoying writing this story go on do it. If people have a problem with it they can go get stuffed. Read something else on this site then. Guess what language cops, this isn't a college writing course. Ya, e e cummings should have used capital letters too, but he didn't. Life is too short to spend it pissing on someone else's sandwich. Have fun. I will probably read it, I have ridden your train this long.

It would appear that English is not your first language, but it is still readable and relativity understandable.

One technical problem with this story is that you have your male move from anal sex with one sister to vaginal sex this brings up the serious medical problem of cross-contamination by E.Coli and other pathogens which will cause severe uterine infections many of which are resistant to standard antibiotics, proper genital hygiene must be practiced at all times, including fictional situations as unfortunately some readers accept what you write as factually correct.

Thank you for sharing your writing with us