by Huntingtauzero
Not bad... not good... need better breaking points between shower scene and the spanking scene...
Building nicely - but is there a whole section (about 'her untidy room') missing...? It jumps oddly
Crap. Sort of " I got out of bed at 7 am. Oh tiring day, time for bed"
Don't bother continuing
Not bad, but there is a big jump between the shower scene and the spanking scene