All Comments on 'Lives Changed Forever Ch. 02'

Fantastic start to what I hope will be a very loving relationship. What will mommy think about it though? She already has her suspicions raised. Will she want some too?

I have enjoyed reading both chapters of your story. It kept me interested and wanting to read more.

I am wondering what is coming next? Continuation? Pregnancy (no mention of birth control)? Other people? I will be watching for the next installment.

I loved the story. I liked the characters and the way you have them together. It must have been a tremendous shock as they changed the way they looked at each other. I hope you continue this story as they explore each other. Thanks for your time and imagination.

The story has got better. Enjoying it immensely.

its a good story dont get me wrong but the paragraphs are too wordy and too long sometimes. I find myself skipping whole bunches of paragraphs because they dont really add anything of value to whats going on. Im also not a fan of the whole narrator talking sort of writing. The actual dialog between them when they actually talk to each other is too few and far between each other and sandwiched between paragraphs that should be broken up into at least 3 or 4 different paragraphs