All Comments on 'Living On The Edge Ch. 02'

by YourAngelOfChaos

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 3 years ago
too brief

As with the previous chapter, this one is much too brief. Even though it is well-written, it needs a good introduction and build-up. The love scene is likewise too brief, and is not even concluded. This is a good story which could be even better.

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